November 30, 20205 yr It starts very ordinary but soon grows into quite an expressive and nostalgic piece! It's very curious that despite the fact that it's major I feel like this is a sad piece. I feel like it loses some steam at around the 2 minute mark where you start just playing chords in preparation of returning to the main theme. I think this is one of those pieces where it wasn't so very important to end in the same key that you started so you could have recapitulated the main theme in a higher key, giving it a sort of burst of emotion when the new key comes in (although now that I listen again I can hear that you do play the main theme in another key - maybe you could introduce a contrasting theme there and save the key change for the true recap? - just a suggestion). I enjoyed the rich harmonies and listening to this multiple times. Great job!
December 1, 20205 yr Author 7 hours ago, PaperComposer said: I feel like it loses some steam at around the 2 minute mark where you start just playing chords in preparation of returning to the main theme. Did I slow down the pace too much there? I'll be more mindful of it. 7 hours ago, PaperComposer said: I think this is one of those pieces where it wasn't so very important to end in the same key that you started so you could have recapitulated the main theme in a higher key, giving it a sort of burst of emotion when the new key comes in I see, so home key recap isn't that important for this style, that makes things easier 🙂 7 hours ago, PaperComposer said: although now that I listen again I can hear that you do play the main theme in another key - maybe you could introduce a contrasting theme there and save the key change for the true recap? - just a suggestion Yeah, that would work for sure, I keep making 1-theme songs out of habit, I guess :3 Thanks for the review, as always! Now I know what to focus on next 😄
December 1, 20205 yr 25 minutes ago, BC345 said: Did I slow down the pace too much there? I'll be more mindful of it. My comment wasn't meant to address the tempo so much as the lack of a thematic presence - it seemed like you were just marking time with the chords around there. Although now that I listen to it again it doesn't seem to be as big of a problem - you're the composer so you ultimately decide what criticism you give your attention to and whether they have any merit.
December 1, 20205 yr Author 15 hours ago, PaperComposer said: My comment wasn't meant to address the tempo so much as the lack of a thematic presence - it seemed like you were just marking time with the chords around there. Yep, that's what I meant as well, I just worded it poorly. That criticism was on point, I kind of feel the emptiness there too.
April 20, 20214 yr On 11/30/2020 at 2:20 PM, PeterthePapercomPoser said: It's very curious that despite the fact that it's major I feel like this is a sad piece. Sad songs in major keys often to me sound more sad than their minor counterparts Edited July 1, 20214 yr by jejrekmek
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