Un Vent Froid

This is an earlier work for Violin and Piano.  I hope you Un Vent Froid...7-22-21.pdffeel the chill in the air!

I enjoyed your piece! I especially liked the change of texture at b. 17. It is a relatively short piece, that in my mind feels complete, though I wonder if you could expand on a few sections (maybe the section on the second page?).

As with some of your other pieces, I think you chose some interesting intervals throughout, and they definitely bring strength to your choice of harmony. I might consider looking for places to provide space in the music, especially for the violin. Even it is a crotchet's worth, it'll break the music up so that it doesn't feel too constant or even rushed (something like the move from b. 20 to b. 21 is effective, and I think it could benefit earlier in the piece!).

In terms of engraving, I think you've done a pretty good job! I would suggest that you only include dynamics for both hands of the piano if they differ, which they don't seem to do here (though this is to do with the music software maybe?). 

I also think it might be useful for the violinist if they had some phrase markings/slurs that they would use to determine the emotional character and their bowing.

I would consider doing away with the abbreviated staff names as well! When it is only piano + instrument, it isn't wholly necessary. For this combination, the "solo" instrument (violin here) would have a staff at 75% the size of the piano (if this is something possible in your software).This will impact the margins of the music in a positive way (in fact, I would increase the margin size left and right, top and bottom by a good deal). As a bonus, this would make it more clear to you that moving b. 27 onto page 3 (which I think would make sense).

These are some thoughts, and I hope you find them useful. Overall, I enjoyed your piece!

Thank you for the review and suggestions!  The engraving advice is well received.  I am please you are getting to know my style of work.  And of course of you enjoy the work - all the better!

Mordante, cette petite bise.

Quite a bit of dissonances here, which catch the attention of the ear, while the texture does its job at reminding a chill breeze on an october morning. I am not so familiar with this kind of work, but I did find it interesting, tho I envision it more as an ambiance music (for a movie scene maybe), than a piece that I would sit down and listen to per se.

Nicely done!

Interesting work! I would say that the use of harmonies in unconventional intervals is unique! It really did help the harmonies from not becoming too stale! However, I do think there could be more action or creativity displayed. u could for example try experimenting with pizz or gliss pizz to achieve the same effect, or sul tasto on the violin which would help to advance its tone colour (if u wish to, u could refer to Poulenc's Violin Sonata Mvt 2). I think you experiment with more adventurous figurations for both instruments as well

Thanks for the review and suggestions.  Are  a violinist?

15 hours ago, MJFOBOE said:

Thanks for the review and suggestions.  Are  a violinist?

 

Yep I am!