Sonata- Leidsturm 1st Mvt.

Constructive criticism is warmly appreciated

Wow, what an impressive masterpiece, and I truly appreciate your hard work! You must have spent a lot of time on this! I hear a lot of Beethoven from this piece, but it doesn't sound classical to me - it's more to neoclassicism. I adore your creative use of motifs, especially the octave passages in bar 26, bars 28-29, and bars 149-151. The overall mood of the piece is fiery, which definitely fits the title of the music. Keep up the great work!

On 10/29/2022 at 9:32 PM, Carl Koh Wei Hao said:

Wow, what an impressive masterpiece, and I truly appreciate your hard work! You must have spent a lot of time on this! I hear a lot of Beethoven from this piece, but it doesn't sound classical to me - it's more to neoclassicism. I adore your creative use of motifs, especially the octave passages in bar 26, bars 28-29, and bars 149-151. The overall mood of the piece is fiery, which definitely fits the title of the music. Keep up the great work!

 

Thank you so much for the kind feedback! 😊

Beethoven much? 😄

This was crafted really well, and you've certainly had quite the output as of late. I love the A theme, very dramatic and riveting. If would have given the B theme a bit less density, it was overall a great contrast, but personally I like having more difference in texture. It was just very thick throughout.

That's not to say I didn't like it! Great adherence to the form, and you showed a wide range of creativity in developing your material. How far along are you with the other movements? I like to listen to these types of things in order, so I'm excited to hear your finished product. 

Thanks for sharing, and don't be afraid to toss your thoughts around to other works around here, I'm sure others would love your input!

13 hours ago, Thatguy v2.0 said:

Beethoven much? 😄

This was crafted really well, and you've certainly had quite the output as of late. I love the A theme, very dramatic and riveting. If would have given the B theme a bit less density, it was overall a great contrast, but personally I like having more difference in texture. It was just very thick throughout.

That's not to say I didn't like it! Great adherence to the form, and you showed a wide range of creativity in developing your material. How far along are you with the other movements? I like to listen to these types of things in order, so I'm excited to hear your finished product. 

Thanks for sharing, and don't be afraid to toss your thoughts around to other works around here, I'm sure others would love your input!

 

Haha thanks so much! It's a valid criticism that it is too thick throughout. That is why I am making the second movement to be overall light and very slow. Although I don't always want to sound like beethoven, i just can't help sometimes 😅as he is one of my idols. Thanks for listening! And sure I'll try to share my thoughts on so many brilliant works here in this platform 🙂

This is an absolutely wonderful piece.

It's very motivicly dense, which shows a very strong understanding of form and craft. As a lot of other people have pointed out, it strongly resembles Beethoven in certain passages, though I don't think this detracts from the work as a whole at all.

As with others though, I do find the textures a bit dense. Though you seem to be aware of that and are planning to add more contrast by way of later movements.

One thing I haven't seen people mention, however, is the passage from Measures 142-151, which to be reminds me of Schubert with it's repeated rhythmic figures slowly building into the outburst of (I think?) the recapitulaion.

Overall a truly masterful piece, I look forward to hearing what comes next with this composition.

10 hours ago, mercurypickles said:

This is an absolutely wonderful piece.

It's very motivicly dense, which shows a very strong understanding of form and craft. As a lot of other people have pointed out, it strongly resembles Beethoven in certain passages, though I don't think this detracts from the work as a whole at all.

As with others though, I do find the textures a bit dense. Though you seem to be aware of that and are planning to add more contrast by way of later movements.

One thing I haven't seen people mention, however, is the passage from Measures 142-151, which to be reminds me of Schubert with it's repeated rhythmic figures slowly building into the outburst of (I think?) the recapitulaion.

Overall a truly masterful piece, I look forward to hearing what comes next with this composition.

 

Your kind and thoughtful feedback genuinely made my day and you have my immense gratitude for that! 🙂