bagatelle 42

Hi here is the start of a score by me. It's just the starting section need help thinking of what comes next.

Enjoy!

Hey @HtWinsor,

2 hours ago, HtWinsor said:

It's just the starting section need help thinking of what comes next.

Can you confirm which kind of help needed? Is it on the form? On the modulation? On motivic and thematic usage?

For me you should try developing the materials at hand first (again!). The perfect cadence in b.9 seems strange since it's too confirmed a manner while the material is developing! Every time you write cadences, make sure what key you're in and why do you need that, and what key you will go to next! I absolutely love the opening C# minor material since it's in my favourite key, and it's more romantic here. You can at least add some embellishments for it before moving on!

The C double sharp and tactus in b.13 are strange for me. You return to C# minor with no reason there! You should at least have a half cadence to the V of C# minor before getting in! Basic knowledge of the cadences is important for the grammar of music! Always remember why you have to change key but not for no reason!

But I'm real happy as I think you have at least tried in this bagatelle! Just think more instead of posting will be better!

Henry

20 hours ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

Hey @HtWinsor,

Can you confirm which kind of help needed? Is it on the form? On the modulation? On motivic and thematic usage?

For me you should try developing the materials at hand first (again!). The perfect cadence in b.9 seems strange since it's too confirmed a manner while the material is developing! Every time you write cadences, make sure what key you're in and why do you need that, and what key you will go to next! I absolutely love the opening C# minor material since it's in my favourite key, and it's more romantic here. You can at least add some embellishments for it before moving on!

The C double sharp and tactus in b.13 are strange for me. You return to C# minor with no reason there! You should at least have a half cadence to the V of C# minor before getting in! Basic knowledge of the cadences is important for the grammar of music! Always remember why you have to change key but not for no reason!

But I'm real happy as I think you have at least tried in this bagatelle! Just think more instead of posting will be better!

Henry

 

Hi I'm just looking for ideas to follow the material presented.

Just now, HtWinsor said:

Hi I'm just looking for ideas to follow the material presented.

For me you have many ideas at hand. Rather than looking for new ideas you can simply develop your own ideas at hand first! The opening 4 bar melody in C# minor, contrasting 5 bar theme in E major in b.5-9, transitional arpeggio in b.10-11, b.14-21 staccatissimo theme, b.22-27 triplet theme where you develop from b.2, all can be taken to follow your present passages! Economical use of materials is important for me and you should try using your present materials before new varieties must be added.

Henry