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Hello everyone,

This is my first post here and I wanted to share a piece I recently wrote with you all. Let me know your thoughts!

 

The five poems within my composition Poetry collectively narrate a heartbreakingly beautiful, vastly complex, and motivically interwoven tale.

The suite opens with the Prelude (0:02), a fantasy-like prophecy of the other poems in the suite; the bells of reality can be heard in the distance. Dreamy visions pass transiently through the background noise, and as the piece progresses, the bells increase in intensity to prevent the visions from fully materializing. The bells soon find themselves trapped in a climactic whirlwind as they start to transcend time and space, like accelerating into a wormhole, falling faster and faster and faster...

In the Lament (4:34), one finds oneself in a completely new world - one that is bare and empty. The offbeat rhythms insinuate a notion of regret, and the unresolved pedal point during the climax leaves the listener yearning for closure, although there is none to find. This poem ends with a painful lullaby-like restatement of the opening theme, as if crying oneself to sleep.

During the night, the Nocturne (8:12) slowly brings the once-barren world to life. After a plainly stated opening theme, the progressive harmonies start to bring wonder and color to the world, while the stars twinkle in the distance. As the sun rises, its rays illuminate the colors of the landscape, which mix to create a brilliant backdrop of green mountains, purple flowers, and a golden sky.

The Scherzo (12:07) is an idyllic depiction of the utopia the world has now become. There is joy to find in life! Jokes to laugh at! Authentic cadences, for the first time! The tender, warm feeling of being loved! Moments of pure brilliance and ecstasy! Excitement! What is there not to live for? It's everything one could ever want in...

Postlude (18:46): a snap back to the bells of reality.

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Wow, what an amazing composition, I love how all of this five pieces fit together to narrate a story

I love how the prelude has some impressionist vibes, it sounds similar to Scarbo from Gaspard de la nuit or the fourth Scriabin sonata, I also love the fact that it is even more energetic with the time, with a very good climax near the end, like the ravel’s bolero (always growing sound in a long crescendo)

The Lament has a very good atmospheric and disperse sound, it is very introspective and it personally reminded me of Debussy

The dream-like vibes of the nocturne are great and it is a wonderful piece to to listen to with such a good Harmony

Same thing to say about the scherzo, but in this case that dream like harmonies sections are contrasted with more toy-like sections which flow so smoothly into each other, this toy-like sections give a sense of being aware of reality too, not only dreaming, and how that contrast combines in the final angry climax, reminds me of Ondina from gaspard de la nuit

And the final postlude is the most sublime way to continue after such a  devastating climax, (reminds me somehow of le gibet from gaspard de la nuit), keeping a repetitive motif * throughout the piece like if it is a thought haunting you and you cannot get rid of that thought, it is very minimalist and reminds me of Satie, but I think it would be more effective if it was shorter 

*and recapitulating the way the piece started in the end, that is so good

I love the recording, it is played with such a passion and emotion

I saw in your profile and it makes sense your favourite composer is ravel, you sound like him (I try to sound like Rachmaninov, but my compositions sound more like a bad copy of Liszt lacking of virtuosity 😞)

Thank you for uploading this great content, I hope you upload more of your pieces

 

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