Mystery at merida

This piece I am writing is based of a murder mystery at a historical circus called Merida in Merida, Spain. It’s not finished so I advise to not listen when things get super quiet hahaha. But some constructive criticism as I am half way done would be very helpful. Ps. I suck at percussion scoring.

https://s3.ultimate-guitar.com/musescore.scoredata/g/46a9d8338df90c8e8faacdec6d644757818298bf/score_full.pdf?response-content-disposition=attachment%3B filename%3D"A_tragedy_at_Merida.pdf"&X-Amz-Content-Sha256=UNSIGNED-PAYLOAD&X-Amz-Algorithm=AWS4-HMAC-SHA256&X-Amz-Credential=4SHNMJS3MTR9XKK7ULEP%2F20240702%2Fus-west%2Fs3%2Faws4_request&X-Amz-Date=20240702T025732Z&X-Amz-SignedHeaders=host&X-Amz-Expires=300&X-Amz-Signature=78cf80bc59cc2bce023dd4a556d17584ae8601fb7d27c1c1fe41fefbf762a5d5

Edited July 2, 20241 yr by Hc123

Hello @Hc123!

I'll comment on the first 2 minutes since that's as much of it that seems like it's finished.  I really like how the piece starts very underwhelmingly.  I think the percussion in the beginning before the 1 minute mark with all the drums could be louder.  You're inexperienced at writing percussion parts so naturally, through your timidity you've rendered them too quietly in this recording imo.  After the 1 minute mark though, I think it's the same problem except now you're overusing the percussion when it should only be used sparingly and to accentuate important moments with the orchestra (especially the cymbal crashes).  But the percussion instruments that are laying down the groove with the orchestra (the various drums) should be brought out more and balanced perhaps at equal importance to the rest of the accompanying instruments in the orchestra.  Those are my thoughts about that.  Thanks for sharing!

P.S.:  The score link doesn't work!

https://musescore.com/user/1990646/scores/15992089/s/0rv0Jj?share=copy_link
 

sorry this link should work now