March 30, 2025Mar 30 Hello @Mikayla and welcome to the forum! This is a very creative idea and concept for a 4-hand piano piece! I like the main theme as well. In measure 18 you're using a D half-diminished chord which to me would sound better as a Bb9 6/3. The voicing in my opinion would also sound better if the right hand of the bass clef piano player was playing Bb-F-Bb as the open 5th would really nicely accompany the D in the bass. Overall, too, I think you're using too many triads in the low range of the piano which makes it sound a bit muddy. Thanks for sharing and I hope to see more of your contributions to the forum!
March 31, 2025Mar 31 Author 4 hours ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said: Hello @Mikayla and welcome to the forum! This is a very creative idea and concept for a 4-hand piano piece! I like the main theme as well. In measure 18 you're using a D half-diminished chord which to me would sound better as a Bb9 6/3. The voicing in my opinion would also sound better if the right hand of the bass clef piano player was playing Bb-F-Bb as the open 5th would really nicely accompany the D in the bass. Overall, too, I think you're using too many triads in the low range of the piano which makes it sound a bit muddy. Thanks for sharing and I hope to see more of your contributions to the forum! Thanks so much for the feedback! Always looking to improve.
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