Wings of icarus. Piano sketch. WIP

Hello dear people. I have composed a new compostion and i would appreciate it very much if I could get some critique on the composition, anything you notice is vaild and some points I would like critique on it this: The cohesiveness of the piece, how well the piece creates tension for example, if it feels like the piece have "bumps" where it feel like it goes off. How well I exsecute the harmonic progressions and cinematic feel.

The composition is influenced by Thomas Bergersen whom I listen to a lot these days. Like pretty much on a daily basis.  
Thanks so much in advance

Hi @Bjarke!

 I like this Perpetuum mobile texture which really gives motion to the piece, as well as the imitations between the hands. The modulations are effective especially for a cinematic music. Of course, dynamic details would be crucial to propel the flow and drama of the music. Thx for sharing.

Henry

Hi Bjarke,

Think it's a good piece; but the ending feels rather abrupt to me.

If it were my work, I would end with a pattern of descending arpeggios from high to low register, followed by the chords you already have.

Might also be worth experimenting with ebbs and flows in the tempo to create some rubato. Not sure it would work; but may be worth a try.

Hello, I enjoy this piece a lot. I appreciate the key changes and the harmonic context given.  The rhythmic content is also really good.    The only things I have to say, though is that the left-hand could be a little bit louder in the introduction in the first few measures first 30 most likely.   Also, this is just a playability issue but make sure that some of the left-hand stuff if it goes above the staff to put in treble if need be. I think you’re already doing it but there’s some parts where there’s like six ledger lines on the left hand.   But I enjoy the moment given off from this piece. Good job.