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3 minutes ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

Those are just your opinions offered without anything to substantiate them. Do you have any constructive feedback to offer? Perhaps you could use the Reviewing Template to justify your opinion?

I'm just going to send my own composition and what I mean will be more understandable in comparison

weird...

@D.V.Vanin, my friend... May I ask you, how do you go about "writing" your music? Do you notate it? Do you improvise a motif then improvise the rest after you've settled on that motif?

I'm hearing so much repetition, far too many Parallel 5ths, and what you have here is quite formless... As in; there are no distinct sections that I can follow the music through to the end. Music that will appeal to people, whether musically inclined or not, has structure, attention to detail, enjoyable harmonic ideas, and a motif that's recognizable as a "home" sound that the music returns to.

To help simplify, I could use the basic pop music structure without going into Music Theory terminology...
Most pop songs are written;
(Verse) - (Verse) - (*Chorus*(The motif)) - (Verse) - (Verse) - (Chorus) - (*Bridge*(Something new and interesting)) - (Chorus(Make it back to the "home" motif)) - (Outro (Usually a variation of the chorus)).

I can't distinctly make out anything even similar to this with the audio you've provided. It has something of a medieval / neo-classical hybrid kind of theme, with no structure, and no recognizable / memorable sound, making the music all around very flat, dull, and unnoteworthy.

I mean no malice when saying this. My intent is to help you see what you are doing that may be hindering your musical output, and where to focus in order to make your work that much better. I'd urge you to read a book I've recently acquired that may help you with this, called "The Science of Music" by Allen Van Wert. (Amazon link to purchase the paperback copy, if you'd like.)
It's quite capable of explaining many of the basic concepts of music theory in a digestible way for beginners, those with learning disabilities, and those with trouble understanding the concepts. It includes exercises as well within the book itself. It's not all intensive, and enitrely comprehensive to everything you need to know, but it can help provide you with a good start...

I encourage you to never leave this interest of yours behind, and simply begin to make attempts to grasp the important concepts of what makes great musical output, so that we all may enjoy what you come up with, armed with the proper knowledge. :)

-Unc