The Phoebes Wept

Hey everyone,

Just thought I'd share this really short piece I wrote called "The Phoebes Wept". I composed this today in about a half an hour. Tell me if you like it, and if you think it's worth expanding. Cheers!

Listen here.

P.S. Anybody know what poem I got the title from? Gold star for anyone who does.:D

It has a nice melody ,and intro. You really impressed me with your intro. Some might say that your intro is to simple ,but I think that this song is meant to be slow ,and simple. The only thing that I might suggest is that I felt that your song toward the end started to get boring with the same rhythm. Other than that I felt that you have a Really Good work here. Keep it up!!!!

I would try adding more to this ,and then post the rest. Good Luck!!!!!

Hey, thanks. Yeah the intro I pretty much came up with on the spot, but it stuck with me. I think I'll keep working on this.:D

I think that you will do great!!!

it will be a good piece, the only thing is the structure, make it with a good structure

keep composing

Yeah I'll try to keep it with a good structure... unfortunately that's a challenge for me.:thumbsup:

Yeah I'll try to keep it with a good structure... unfortunately that's a challenge for me.:w00t:

structure is a challenge for everyone, so you