The Elegy of Our Men (musical)

Hello! It's been a while, but I've been working steady. I finished another song for my musical, The Deliverance of Brunswick. This song will take place after a battle scene in which many of the men from Brunswick are lost. So, I was going for a minor, almost Gregorian chant mood. I'm not really sure about some of the words- please let me know if you have any ideas regarding other options for the libretto. I would also like to expand this piece quite a bit (maybe 3 minutes?)

Thanks for taking the time to listen! :o

The Elegy of Our Men.nwc

The Elegy of Our Men.mid

The Elegy of Our Men.pdf

I love love love the open fifths on the ends of phrases, that's very authentic.

Some of the chords seem a little awkwardly placed though, e.g. the last beat of the second bar and the first beat of the third bar: there's no real resolution and it feels like it meanders until the cadence. The second cadence point is really strong, though.

I think that the words are great and that you've set them really well!

Thanks! :P The open interval feel is my favorite too.

I'm not sure what you mean about the cadence. I think the place you mentioned has a good sense of movement- the bass line is real solid, the soprano melody is natural-feeling, and the inner voices seem to complement the outer voices. There are some progressions that I think could use some work, but I don't think the transition from m. 2 to m. 3 is one of them. Let me know what you mean please :)

Very nice! It really sets the tone for the aftermath of the scene. I think the lyrics are just right. I would really like so see it fully orchestrated. Well done!