Erebus, a work in progress

I've trying to fix this piece up and end it (p.s. the very end of this isn't actually part of the song, I just forgot to delete it) but I am having some troubles.

Suggestions and comments are very appreciated

And in case you don't know what "Erebus" is:

Erebus: In Greek Mythology: "Deep blackness/darkness or shadow" Erebus was the son of a primordial God, Chaos; the personification of darkness and shadow. In late legends, Erebus was part of Hades, the underworld, it was where the dead had to pass immediately after dying.

I would recommend listening to the link and watching the finale score (sometimes it sounds better)

Erebus 69 - Putfile

Erebus.MUS

The piece sets a great mood. Really mysterious. Right now I'm listening to it for the second time. I think it's a great beginning for a piece, but it doesn't really lead to something, but since it's still in progress, I think it has potential. :)

Maybe a few bars of introductionary pianissimo preceding it? It's too "in your face" for me without a more of an introduction.

Thanks for the replys, it seems to me that most people don't reply so I appreciate your comments and will try to incorporate your ideas.:)