Ab Minor 'Floating in the Walls'

this is my first chamber piece, i dont usualy dabble in orchestra, only piano and modern rock music. this piece, it doesnt really have a direction, the main idea is to get the listener to completely let go, mentally :P please review and comment thanks.

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So the slow stuff at the beginning is cool. I hope it picks up at some point, because you've already beefed up the orchestration so much that it can't build that way. Oh, so it's only 2:10. The player showed that at 1:45 I was about a 10th the way through the piece. Okay, so for being 2:10 it was good. It felt like there definitely could have been more, though not to this piece. Maybe a few movements, this being the first. I feel like this would be a good funeral march piece. What's the exact instrumentation?

I feel like this would be a good funeral march piece.

the main idea is to get the listener to completely let go, mentally :P

I wonder if he meant it that literally...