"far too quiet" by pop song

attached to this post is a pop song i recently scored. im pretty shocking at lyrics, so please dont shoot me.

ps: also guess what i found a really old post by me in 2005 :O http://www.youngcomposers.com/forum/my-song-what-we-did-together-161.html

okay enjoy, and comments / suggestions would be heaps appreciated

far too quiet.txt

watch.mid

a ma zing grace. that's what came up to me after the first measurefor vocal :).

some weird stuff is going on from measure 13, you probably didn't assing the dums right (at least in sibelius i'm not getting any drumsounds).

the chord progressions are well, quite generic, but they seem to do the job well enough.

i think your lyrics will fit the songs very good, that's really much all i can say about it.

Any particular reason the verse progression is Pachebel? Making fun of pop music? haha.

Anyway, I like the idea, but some of those piano lines are really questionable. Also, don't over use the crash like that. At least use one of the two sounds you have for crashes. The lyrics... need work I guess. Oh well, props to you for making something like this. :D

yeah, i would recommend you use wmp to play the midi, because i can hear the percussion fine. i dont hear the amazing grace resemblance though :(

anyway the chord progressions are C,G,Am,F etc until the end, with some tiny variations (being Dm,G and C,G,Dm,F) so i definately didn't intend for anyone to hear pachebel in this, but generally pop songs that use the pachebel progression i think sound pretty good, so ill take that as a compliment :O

im still working on my percussion scoring, with me not ever touching a drum kit ever before, and prehaps i should only use the crash sparingly.

thanks for the comments, though, they are greatly appreciated.