Original Compositions: Heath, and an untitled song

Hey guys, I'm new here... I'm not a very good instrumentalist or singer... well, you be the judge. I would appreciate it if you can listen and comment on my recent compositions... They sound a bit off key at times.

Heath - Song - MP3 Stream on IMEEM Music

"Heath" is a song dedicated to Heath Ledger. I love his movies and its a shame he passed away so soon...

Lyrics:

I wonder what you thought

When the rush kicks in faster than you have hoped?

You had too much sleep

And like a poison it taste sweeter when you begin.

And as the neighbors lie that night

Awake, you say "It's so much better here awake than be betrayed."

I recognize your face

Just as well as I hope to feel your embrace

I know we'll never meet

I guess I'll see you sooner if I can't bear the pain

Chorus 1

Chorus 2:

And while I sleep that day

At night awake you said "I'll never leave to be away when my time ends."

I'll never leave to be away when my time ends

It's so much better here awake than be betrayed

Original song composition 2 - Song - MP3 Stream on IMEEM Music

Song #2 has no title yet.

Lyrics:

The band on stage keeps on playing that song

A song full of rage, I felt like I belong

He sings a tune from his fretted dreams

The smoke-filled room is not what it seems

As soon as he stops playing

I woke up not breathing

I sing that tune, and time always stops

It's over soon, and I can't get enough

My heartbeat slows, but it never grows old

The pain doesn't show, you know I'll take it all

I want to forget, to run and to regret

But I know its sinful hearing

When you stop listening

I know I'll keep playing

I know I'll keep listening

There's no more pretending

What's mine is for taking

May I suggest that you upload your mp3 to a place that I don't have to join to listen.

There are a number of sites like boxnet that are free and do not require joining just to listen.

Ron

ok, thanks will do. i didn't know you have to be a member to listen, it wasn't like that before...