Coronation for Brass Choir (Op.27, no.1)

This is from a set of independant programmatic pieces designated for brass choir. I'm posting the entire set, which consists of...

1: Coronation for Brass Choir (Op.27, no.1)

2: Todesmarsch for Brass Choir (... and Percussion)(Op.27, no.2)

3:Der Erlk

The first part was fantastic, then it sounded like a horrible nintendo varation set

This is coming from a plebian who has no intention of applying any theory knowledge here.

Enigmus, on the whole, okay piece. The Fanfare is too lacking in harmonisation to be fanfare , IMO. to me it sounds more like some kid having fun... u get my idea?

Probably thicken your harmony and add in some percussion. I do not sense any swelling that you have said in your programmic notes.

Also, keep the cheesy counterpoint to a minimum, or add more voices. Two voices in that accord imo sounds like, some mario game?

okay, thats all I have to say, I will go forth to your second piece...

I really liked it, actually. It didn't bother me that it sounded like "some mario game." The opening could have been thicker, but... I enjoyed it. :)