Why are you here?

For the past few months, I've had this itch to write either a musical or a one act opera. Today, I had a lot of free time on my hands and so I headed down to Downtown Santa Barbara. A good 10 min. away from where I live. After a while, I left empty handed.

However, on the freeway on ramp, there was this guy around my age with a sign that said "SLO" (San Louis Obispo). He was trying to hijack a ride. Then a wave of questions hit me "What was he doing here? How did he get all the way down here? What's there in SLO?!"

I then went into a practice room on campus for a while and came up with this: The first number to I don't know yet.

I'm still trying to figure it all out in my head as far as scenes and characters are concerned.

In any case: ENJOY! :D

THE mp3 is here: Compositions of Kyle Ukes on MySpace Music - Free Streaming MP3s, Pictures & Music Downloads

Why are you here.pdf

Why are you here.MUS

I know you didn't post this with the aim of looking for a collaborator, but I absolutely love the song, and the premise and would love to work with you on this if you wanted a partner. We can talk more if you're interested, but the idea just sparked for me and I absolutely love it. I have been working on musicals of my own, and I think I have good starting ideas, but I'm not a writer. I can write music and lyrics, but I always blank when it comes to storyline, and I always think, if I had a writer to work with, or even another mind who wanted to do the same sort of thing, it'd be so much easier/better. Let me know.

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it. I do kind of want to go solo on this one but if you want to collaberate on other projects I'm totally down. Although my weak point is lyrics so if there is any feedback you think would help I'm all eras. Thanks again! Ps what part of Cali are you from?

I'm from SLO!!!! Kidding, I'm from So Cal...Riverside Area. Lyric wise, there are a few places where the emphasis of a word or phrase falls on weak beats, and thus sounds off to the ear. Your lyrics themselves are fine, mostly, but it's unnaturally set. "I am half your size" With your melody, the emphasis being on 1(stronger) and 4(weaker) in this meter, the important words that you convey are "I, your" whereas actually the important words in the sentence are "half/size"(In normal speech anyway, unless your way is intended). (I'm a singer, lyrics and vocal anything is my specialty). "Would you like to borrow my phone ?" The emphasis in the word borrow is on Bor....which you have on 6...the weakest beat in this meter, while row(the weaker syllable) is on 1 of the next measure (the strongest beat). As I said, this can be intentional. Thinking of Shakespeare (though not conventionally a lyricist, his poems were often musical in form) he used breaks in his rhythm to emphasize passages or to show distress, etc. The audience will hear it, even those not musically trained, because we are used to hearing the language a certain way. Otherwise...this sort of problem is slim to none elsewhere. I just scanned again. I really like your layering of the melodies and the lyrics are funny. Good work, truly. If you change your mind on the collab...(which you should)...let me know. I'll be in touch, there's a lot of stuff I'm working on, though I'm on a new computer which has none of my work on it, and my files are all backed up and ready to be put on here, but I haven't sat down to do it yet. Some day soon.

Oh that's really cool! I'm orriginaly from north OC. I see whet you are talking about with the emphasis. I will rework it. Like I said I still haveno idea where I'm hoiing with this so I might need another brain thinking about it. Thanks again and good luck on your projects! :)

I like the story line :D a jokie convosation you would have with a stranger, but looking at the piano... There seems to be a few accidentals laters which just looks odd :D i have wrote a couple of musical numbers, and likeOMWBWAY am looking to partener up maybe a 3 way thingys lol :D that could be cool. Your singing rythem seems a little off to me, Some times it dosnt seem like it would be said like that, certain sylables are held longer then they normally would be...

I like the story line :D a jokie convosation you would have with a stranger, but looking at the piano... There seems to be a few accidentals laters which just looks odd :D i have wrote a couple of musical numbers, and likeOMWBWAY am looking to partener up maybe a 3 way thingys lol :D that could be cool. Your singing rythem seems a little off to me, Some times it dosnt seem like it would be said like that, certain sylables are held longer then they normally would be...

Thanks for your feedback. I have reworked it a lot and changed a lot of things for the better conversationally speaking. I will hope to post it soon along with the song that follows this one.

Thanks again! :)