Help! Orchestra piece in progress

Hello! I'm working on this piece, it's a mix of various harmony elements... well now I'm in rush so no much to say... I need feedback for this beggining, and help with the solo flute... The last two measures are bad written (Finale newbie) and the solo flute on measure 24 is clearly not fully orchestated and I need feedback on that theme that is presented by the solo flute... And of course feedback on the all part-of-the-piece thing. I really would appreciate your help!! And finally, the score is a total mess, Im ashamed of it :toothygrin:

Thank you!!

P.S. Don't go hard on me! =P

Many thanks form Chile,

Sebastian

EDIT: New flute theme, not yet fully orchestrated, pdf in adition and modified midi (Mp3 soon coming)!

Thanks!

Eter.pdf

Partitura 2.mus

Eter.mid

page 2: why is 1st flute below 2nd flute?

don't use ties for slurs.

piccolo and flute parts are way too low to be heard "forte" with the full orchestra.

page 3, that flute part is too low. not all flautists have a B extension, and even if your flautist does, it won't be heard over the rest of the orchestra.

Yeah now I realize I messed up with the flute and piccolo parts in the tutti, I will correct that... Well I'm just starting at orchestration so that's the reason why I made that huge mistake... I thought that if the other parts were in a higher register than the flute, the flute would sound anyway (speaking for the part in Page 3) and the ties issue was because I didn't know hoe to make sulrs now I have to correct all fo them (I said that the score was a total mess, just look at the cresc's an dim's).

Make a PDF score and mp3 so the other half of the world not using Finale can see/listen to it.

I think it's a promising start if maybe not all that original. It reminded me heavily of film music in a lot of places. Around 0:34 or so, I really liked it. At 1:23, you seem like you're building up to something but instead you just cut-off the phrase. I'd recomend either expounding on it and building up some more possibly with a modulation to build some tension.

Speaking of modulations, I feel this would be a good idea in general. A work rarely can stay in one key for more than two minutes and maintain interest.

Another idea I think would work well is, after a rather loud section, a sudden drop-off in volume and a repeat of your opening in a different key.

You have some nice melodies here that I'd like to hear developed upon some more. Around one minute or so you appear to be using a certain motif repeateldy. It'd be nice to hear an elaboration/expansion on that.

Anyway, hopefully that's of some help.

Thank you! Well I think a lot of contemporary music sounds like incidental... starting from avant-garde... Yeah but I know what you mean, some measures actually sound a lot like film music, but I think I managed not to get that much incidental in later development of the music, correct me if I'm wrong...

In that repetead motif at the beggining, you're absolutely right, I'm thinking on adding some little expansion on that, because also for me it is sounding repeatitive, and with that elaboration it may lose a little of that filmic thing going... about the phrase at 1:23... yeah I have a similar feeling too maybe it would be nice to add one or two measures more before the big G5...

A repeat on the opening after a sudden drop-off... don't like this idea but repeating it in some place and in a different key, absolutely...

I'll try to work more on modulation, but I really composer mostly for ear, this is my first orchestra composition (I compose for a prog rock band, this music it's just one idea after another, some repeats and more straight harmony tan mayor modulations, using modal) So I will read a lot about harmony and listen to some Schubert's Lieder or Mehndelsohn's piano works lol.

Thank you so much for your help! I'm glad you liked it a little. I've listened to your piano work, it is quite beautiful! Hope to see some more of your music too.

Sebastian

This feels very much like an introduction to something.

I second what Nirvana said about modulation.

I like it, so far!