Short String Quartet piece

Hello again everyone. I had put up a link to this piece before under subject about bowing, and now that I've completed it I would like some feedback about the piece as a whole. I'm going to get a quarter to do a reading soon, so I want to make absolutely sure that this piece is perfect before then. Let me know what you all think.

score:

page 1 http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3643/3638174606_be4ab4d628.jpg?v=0

page 2 http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2469/3637361597_c7a57fb5cd.jpg?v=0

page 3 http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3543/3638174718_d909c4bb76.jpg?v=0

page 4 http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3619/3637361709_177c999055.jpg?v=0

music mp3:

String_Score_1.mp3 - FileFactory

The download slot has expired....

Here's a link that should work: String_Score_1.mp3 - FileFactory

still not working.

Try box.net

Sorry. Here's a link to Box.net: http://www.box.net/index.php?rm=box_mp3_player_run&id=f_299773684&name=String%20Score%20%231.mp3&myfiles=1

thanks for your patience.

That one says "wrong file"

Do this: if you have a .pdf score and a .midi soundfile, upload them directly to these forums.

E: Wait, the original links work for me. Though there's only 4 pages, and more music than that.

Well it sounds nice, maybe a bit slow but there's still movement and direction. Y'know. Nothing to rave about but certainly a well put-together work.

What's with the fifth staff though? It sounded like pizzicato, why wasn't it on the other staves?

Thanks for your comments, Dev. I uploaded the wrong score. The fifth staff was just added because the pizzicato part does not sound "pizzicato" unless you create a separate staff/channel for the pizzicato string part. I've edited the original post to correct this.

As far as the "meh"-ness of it, I have to agree. I don't usually like to write slow, melodramatic pieces but they're easy to write. The idea behind this one was to have as many modulations to far away keys as possible without them being too obvious and jarring.

If you guys had suggestions about technical issues too, that would be very helpful. Is the bowing written in well? How easy do you guys think it would be to play? Are there any notes which need to be enharmonically respelled? Are the key changes too abrupt and jarring? And so forth...