December 30, 200916 yr OK, heres something I put together for one of the chamber music ensembles here in college... The piece itself is lively and up-tempo- I got the idea that I wanted to write some sort of a dance,,, so what results is a scherzo-like waltz in 15/8 :/ don't know how that happened! :D Please share your thoughts and any constructive criticism is more than welcome! Enjoy! Piano Trio
December 30, 200916 yr As I like the computer generated sound and the lovely 15/8 rhythm, I wonder. Do you intend this for human preformance? The Right hand piano notes at 24 and 26 and other places seem to wide spaced for easy playing.
December 31, 200916 yr In beat 5 of ms.40, the pianist will have a VERYYY far fingureing!!! it is impossible! You do have this in a couple places, so unless you want the pianist to roll the chords, you should probley make the piano a 0ne piano, 4 hands part. You could also rewrite the parts to get the chord also. Also, you song , to me, got a little boring near the end, because of the use of repetition. I do like the song overall, but you need to work on the part writing and repetition. I liked it! Davison
December 31, 200916 yr Do you play piano often??? Because what you have written isn't idiomatic at ALL. Go search some famous piano works and learn about how to write for the instrument instead of blasting down random 4 octave skips on notes. It is without a doubt impossible to play as it is.
December 31, 200916 yr Author wow... now that you all mention it yeah... i'm not writing for salad fingers here! :D some of the leaps in there- you'd want to be a mutant to play them.. the consequences of not playing piano in the music world...:( will definately revise. and yeah jrcramer, this is going to be played by real humans! so this is exactly the type of advice i need before I go embarassing myself... thanks guys! keep the criticism coming!! XD
January 1, 201016 yr Only criticism I can give is to be a little more judicious with your double stops! None of these are really impossible to play (at least not to me) BUT they get tiring to listen to all the time. Double stops are meant to accentuate the melody and piece not draw attention from it - which, to my ears, occured a few times this piece. Structurally, I didn't really care for measures 50 to 61. That passage seems helpful - but really doesn't aide or assist in your overall structural framework.
January 29, 201016 yr Author Only criticism I can give is to be a little more judicious with your double stops! None of these are really impossible to play (at least not to me) BUT they get tiring to listen to all the time. Double stops are meant to accentuate the melody and piece not draw attention from it - which, to my ears, occured a few times this piece. Structurally, I didn't really care for measures 50 to 61. That passage seems helpful - but really doesn't aide or assist in your overall structural framework. thanks for the criticism guiys, may review some of those double stops and since 50-61 is just one of the permutated statements of the theme, may revise/cut that part. Will be handing the score/CD in to the guys in the next week, so this is all very helpful! have made a few revisions already,, does it make any more sense in your opinion??
January 29, 201016 yr Man..I loved the pizz texture at the beginning and then it stopped after like ten seconds..please use more of it. This piece could potentially be very strong. I won't go in depth about the piano since it has been mentioned. I think your basic ideas are great here..however the development from piece to piece isn't the best yet. Please post after some revisions, this could be a really great piece!
June 16, 201015 yr I agree with benxiwf- use more pizz. in the beginning! I found myself wishing it would continue MUCH longer than it actually did. I was a little taken back by your key change at 75- that one (in my oppinion) did not flow as nicely as the others did (which were very nicely done, I might add). I really enjoyed your choice of instrumentation- very nice blend! I like the ideas you implemented into your melody/harmonic parts. This piece sat very well with me! Well done!
June 16, 201015 yr The pizz. parts are fun, the energy is there.... i would suggest thinning it down in some parts to give contrast to the louder moments. More repetition of ideas I would have liked as well, I feel a bit assaulted by asymmetrical meters at the moment. I thought it was OK. I don't think I can add much to the technical discussion, as much that has to be said has already.
