Lebhafte Fantasie

Hi, I am a 17-year old composer and this is a piece for piano I composed over two schooldays (Mainly in school, so I didn't pay attention at the teacher =) )I hope you like it, the score is not yet written on a computer I have problems with that.Comments and critics are very welcome =)Greetings from BerlinArmin

Lebhafte Fantasie

Interesting. This was pleasant to listen to and something I could probably listen to again when in the mood for some classical piano.

One comment I need to make though is that around 4'22" you're hammering away on this V-I figure that sounds awfully "cadential" or "final" for where it's happening in the piece. This really made the ending of the work questionable for me, because where I heard this hammering storm of a finale midway through your piece, the end made no musical sense to me. Now, you can certainly keep this as an effect if you so choose, leaving your audience baffled as to why they feel the piece ended midway through, or you can restate or finalize that cadence from midway through.

If it were me writing this piece, I would not deliver V-I midway through as you were doing... rather, I might try using some deceptive cadences and inversions that progress through a series of modulations (V/V -> V/ii -> V/vi, etc.) to sort of stir the pot within the sonority and build the expectation for the final cadence at the end of the piece, which you'd deliver at the end instead of midway through... if that makes sense.

But other than that, I think it's quite a good piece for a 17-year old composer. Good work!

That's all. :)

-AA

Thank you very much! These are very good ideas, I think I'll have to work again on this piece =)

Maybe you know this problem: When you finish a composition you have heard it probably 1000 times and I am not exaggerating :D So nothing in this piece is unexpected for you, so thank you again for your "fresh" ears!

Armin

(PS: I'll update the music when I fixed those parts)

What I really liked was the harmonic language of the first theme. The kind of roving gave an uncertain feel, which I really loved.

The other themes were less interesting, and even felt as something obligatory; uninspired. For me the piece as a whole was too long...

I hope you can show us the score one day

What a nice piece! I would love to get the score to play it myself. It must be a feast, and I think an audience will appreciate this as well.

I have to agree with jrcramer: the piece is too long, and sometime this give an overall distortion to the form of it. But there are a lot of interesting material in there!

Keep up the good work!

Ugh: I'd commented on this piece earlier, and my comment has magically disappeared. Stupid site bugs :( I'll paraphrase myself from before.

I really like this! I like the beginning theme, the motif of the piece, the most, and it feels kind of like flowing in a river...

Thanks for sharing!