Taciturn (Rough Version)

A piece that I wrote a few weeks ago... I finally got to notating it today, but I haven't included any dynamic or pedal markings yet (mostly because I'm unsure about the former at this point). The pedal should be depressed throughout and released only for chord changes (usually every 2 bars).Anyway, the music itself is in its final form (as far as chords and melody are concerned).I will not be able to record the piece on a real piano any time soon, so for now this is just a MIDI file. Enjoy!

Taciturn (Rough Version)

Hi Elliot,

Firstly: You mention that your piece is written in C Sharp, yet you begin with an A. Is not it the aim when a piece is written in a key that one has to start with one of the notes of that chord? A is not mentioned in the chord of C sharp.

Second: I do not really understand why you put repetition marks after bar 4. It would look much nicer if you had just copies the preceding bars and had continued without rehearsal bars.

Thirdly:there is no progression in your first four bars. In this type of music one could expect a kind of I VI IV II (?) V degree, also needed to confirm your tonality. You go from an A to an F, A being the VI note, F being the IV note, but there is no clear indication of a tonal path. This is even clearer as the third beat is an E again, E being the VII grade of your F chord. So it is a bit a mingle of unclear elements.This confusion/unclearness remains throughout your work.

Fourthly: If replying this posting, I would like to ask you if you yourself could indicate the construction of your themes: how many bars for theme A, how many for theme B, .... and what happens to it through the piece.Would be nice to hear it from you.

A good attempt in trying to write something, although there is still room for improvement.

Wolfgang Sachs

Nothing positive until the last sentence? haha

I don't know why I marked it as C#. Probably because even though it really is in A, it just doesn't feel like A is the right key. Maybe this piece was a failure, which is ok; it happens. This wasn't really meant to be anything more than it is, just musically wandering around before finding a place to settle in the 2nd half. I wasn't trying to follow any formalities with this piece. I have zero training/education on how to write proper music. This was just something I made up sitting at the piano one day, and it took its current form from being played a few times. I didn't really put time and effort into making sure it made perfect musical sense on paper because it made sense in my head. Maybe I'll keep a few ideas from it and start from scratch.

This is a modal structure, A lydian, which I believe explains the odd progression. I like the harmony, even if it does sound a bit ''pop''. Personally, I find the rythms much too static... 1 - 2 - 3 1 - 2 -3 does lose its charm when used in such a repetitive manner. Overalll, register, rythm, harmony and all are very static, which makes the piece uninteresting. Keep on writint, though, practice makes perfect :santa:

Personally, I don't mind the "pop" association, and I don't really see the problem with sounding a bit "pop." I agree, this piece can get boring, which is something I'll have to work on in the future. I am getting better at it though.