first composition

http://media.putfile.com/dkmidi

This is my first try at writing a song and I'd like to get some feedback on it. I'm really not satisfied with about the first 15 seconds of it, but I've gotten the rest to a point where I quite like.

Can't I get any comment?

If you give us a sensible link to the file, then yes, you will probably get comments. I can't view that page because of some windows codec needed in order to display a player of some sort.

To tell you the truth it was pretty bad. i wouldnt stop composing though. Everyone has to start somewhere. When i first starting composing i thought they were all masterpieces now i look back at them and laugh. i dont know what i was thinking. I would research music theory or if your still in school take a class on it. Theres alot of notes that sound really out of place. At about 1:00 theres that really annoying thing that is horrible. if that wasnt there it would be a little better. Were you using any particuilar scale in this if so could you tell me?

BLINK

Well, Steve, I don't know if you're still around, but I kind of liked it. It had a vibe to it that I liked. And the sound of a steel drum is just so much fun to listen to. It didn't really go anywhere, but that's useful in, say, a video game setting.

I really liked it. It was really far out and intens. You are very talented and you have a future as a composer but you need to work on getting the music a little bit more togheter.

If you want my advise you should analyse the music that you love and just let it sink in to you. I don't know what music you like but the way this piece sounds like I think you should listen to some King Crimson and Frank Zappa.

When it comes to music theory be carefull. It's a great thing to know, and you should know it, but it can really mess you upp if you approach it the wrong way. What you hear and feel is always the right thing. Music theory is just a way of explaining the stuff you hear. It is never a ruel unless you want to write some music in a serten style. Otherwise there are no rules.

Actually I do listen to both Frank Zappa and King Crimson. Thanks for all of the comments. Looking at some parts of the music I would agree that certain things don't always fit as well as they should. I don't have any time in my school schedule to take music theory, so that's not much of a suprise, but I'm glad that the overall effect I wanted still seems to have made it through intact.

When it comes to music theory be carefull. It's a great thing to know, and you should know it, but it can really mess you upp if you approach it the wrong way. What you hear and feel is always the right thing. Music theory is just a way of explaining the stuff you hear. It is never a ruel unless you want to write some music in a serten style. Otherwise there are no rules.

I agree. Music theory is a tool to be used, not a code of law to be obeyed. If there's something that you don't like the effect of (dominant 7th triads, in my case), don't use them. If there's something that you feel can really help you (counterpoint rules, in my case), don't hesitate to incorporate them in some way into your music.

When I learn a new technique, I'll usually write a few study pieces - exercises, if you will - and then go for a performance-ready piece.

yeah lol everytime I learn a new peice of music theory it usually screws with my intuition, however there are those times I will look back at something I wrote on intuition and analyze it and be like cool I understand how this works with theory and why I intuitively wrote it like that, then I can go back and touch it up once I know the structure and theory, other times I try to keep a form and be kind of theoretical and it sounds to much like scale exercises or something.

Anyways I can hear some good potential in there, though it still sounds like the message u are trying to convey is still a little fuzzy, however this all comes with time, just keep working at it, I could find little tiny fragments nesstled in there I liked, but they weren't speaking loudly to me, at least this is how I felt, I guess a good analogy is that it was like a radio station out of tune with static, but I liked the radio station.... hopefully all this abstractness isn't too confusing. And besides this is my opinion, maybe u wrote exactly what u intended to, and it is me, not you that is out of tune.