June 23, 200619 yr Time it took to compose: 2 days(just the 1st movement) Length: 3:32 Style: classical/piano Difficulty: intermediate Here's my 1st movement. I'll post my other movements a little later. Comments and criticisms are more than welcome. Enjoy! 1st_Movement.MID 1st_Movement.MUS
June 23, 200619 yr I like the arpeggios. The piece has a good tempo and I like the overall spirit of it. (Even though I prefer music in minor keys.) You should write one in minor. :shifty:
June 23, 200619 yr A finely constructed little piece there. Good work! :shifty: Of course it reminds me of young Mozart's work. Look forward to hearing the rest. I take it you like the higher notes?
June 24, 200619 yr Author I like the arpeggios. The piece has a good tempo and I like the overall spirit of it. (Even though I prefer music in minor keys.) You should write one in minor. ;) Thank you. I'll probably do that in my 2nd sonata. A finely constructed little piece there. Good work! :thumbsup: Of course it reminds me of young Mozart's work. Look forward to hearing the rest. I take it you like the higher notes? Yes. :D Glad you noticed. They sound very pretty, and chords sound very blurry and messy when they are played among the lower parts of the keyboard. Anyway, thanks for your comments.
June 24, 200619 yr Very nice litte sonata. You are a very fast composer, and i am waiting for the next movement.
June 24, 200619 yr A lovely piece. However, measure 13 is almost exactly the same as measure 9 from the first movement of Kuhlau's Sonatina in C Major (Op. 55, No. 1). I know it doesn't sound like a big deal, but grab a recording--the resemblence is quite obvious. Here's the MIDI for the Kuhlau piece: http://www.karadar.com/dictionary/kuhlau.html
June 24, 200619 yr Author A lovely piece. However, measure 13 is almost exactly the same as measure 9 from the first movement of Kuhlau's Sonatina in C Major (Op. 55, No. 1). I know it doesn't sound like a big deal, but grab a recording--the resemblence is quite obvious. Here's the MIDI for the Kuhlau piece: http://www.karadar.com/dictionary/kuhlau.html lol, yeah! I knew there was something familiar about that measure. The person who wrote the MIDI screwed up big time.
June 24, 200619 yr Author Better than a ton of Nico's stuff... Heh.. thought you would like that comment... Hehe! :P I enjoy that comment a lot (although I know it's not true), but I'm not sure how Nicholas would like it.
June 25, 200619 yr This is... incredibly good! You make my music sound like a baby being murdered with a spork. I love how you manage to pull out the higher notes and place in the faster parts of the song without anything sounding too crowded. I look foward to your next piece.
June 25, 200619 yr lol, yeah! I knew there was something familiar about that measure. The person who wrote the MIDI screwed up big time. Haha, yeah that's true. But he didn't screw up measure 9, and that's all that counts.I realize that I forgot to comment on the actual piece. :glare: It's captured a classical feel quite remarkably, and you really show your knack for writing beautiful melodies. I also love the arpeggios, they really anchor the piece. However, I still feel it needs a bit...more. It's a bit too much Clementi, not enough Mozart, if you know what I mean. It does pretty much everything it's supposed to do, and everything you expect it to do. It's beautifully constructed, however now you need to give it character to make it shine on its own. I really hope I've been constructive. :D
June 25, 200619 yr Author However, I still feel it needs a bit...more. It's a bit too much Clementi, not enough Mozart, if you know what I mean. It does pretty much everything it's supposed to do, and everything you expect it to do. It's beautifully constructed, however now you need to give it character to make it shine on its own. I really hope I've been constructive. ;) Wow, yes, I totally understand what you're saying. At this point in time, it's nearly impossible for me to go back and fix it (I really suck at that), but from now on, I will apply that on a lot, if not all, of my works to come, including the second movement. Thanks for the new tip!
June 26, 200619 yr Wow, yes, I totally understand what you're saying. At this point in time, it's nearly impossible for me to go back and fix it (I really suck at that), but from now on, I will apply that on a lot, if not all, of my works to come, including the second movement. Thanks for the new tip! No problem. Yeah, I wouldn't expect you to go back and edit the whole thing just on hearing my suggestions, that would be very difficult. I'm glad to hear you took them seriously, though. Good luck!
June 26, 200619 yr So now, you have any plans for the next movement? Do you still intend to write one?
June 26, 200619 yr Author Yes, of course, although right now I am on vacation at Yellostone National Park and I might not be back home for at most six days. I'll probably think of something while I'm here.
July 7, 200619 yr Now, this review is not going to be based on personal taste. I'm NOT going to say that it's horribly predictable. Because that would just be mean. And of course, it's idiomatic. Now, to get into the mood of the style... It works. It's very idiomatic. It follows sonata allegro form. You've got your ideas. You play around with them. Chord progressions are typical. For what it is, it's perfect. It's flawless. Not original mind you. Not breathtaking. But it's perfect as a classical duplicate of mozarts style. It's like a university project. Actually, not completely true... Repeated notes and chords, no matter what style, get old. Like whenever you bang down the I I V V I I V V etc etc. Maybe you could make it more interesting by going I VI or something like that. But what the hell, it's good. Just not the most breathtakingly creative. That doesn't necessarily mean atonal. In fact, personally, in retrospect, I don't believe there is even such a THING as atonal music. But anyway, that's another discussion. Good work.
July 7, 200619 yr ^ Agrees with Mr. Monkey. It did seem a bit repetitive, and I wanted it to be over, but it's still great. Maybe shrink it, add a middle section, and develop what you've got more?
July 7, 200619 yr On the one hand I don't consider myself qualified to comment on pieces like this because I don't know that I understand the intricacies of this specific genre - whatever it is. On the one hand, it sound like Scarlatti, but then sometimes like Sor, and other times like Mozart. Some changes (for lack of a better word) seem out of place in any of those idioms (as I perceive them). See my problem? Here are some things that turn my ear and seem ever so slightly out of place: The modulation to C minor at 34 should not be a modulation - I.e. my ear wants it to remain the IV minor chord, soon to arrive back at G major. The way that the chords in measures 47 to 52 function - from D7 to Dmajor seems atypical of any of the genres mentioned above. Otherwise, this piece is solid, moves smoothly from section to section. It's niether too notey or bland; rather, it's effortlessly musical. The dynamics and articulations propel things nicely. But for me, there
July 7, 200619 yr Author Actually, not completely true... Repeated notes and chords, no matter what style, get old. Like whenever you bang down the I I V V I I V V etc etc. Maybe you could make it more interesting by going I VI or something like that. I could try that. That works nicely and seems to make the section more interesting. As for leightwing, "The modulation to C minor at 34 should not be a modulation - I.e. my ear wants it to remain the IV minor chord, soon to arrive back at G major." ??? You'll have to show me what you mean.
