Gray Car Door

If you are NOT Liz Jensen or Michael Lewis, take a guess on how i came up with this XD. It is shorter than my other cadences, but it is also designed differently. Enjoy!Gray Car Door

Gray Car Door

Percussion isn't my strong suit but I like this. Good work. Any chances of getting a reading?

Percussion isn't my strong suit but I like this. Good work. Any chances of getting a reading?

I'm sure there's a possibility somewhere. I'm in college, after all.

Well I have no idea how you wrote this.....so don't come asking me!

You drive a gray car. And slammed the door on your hand.

I think the accents are misplaced in mm.11-12. It really should be on the first of each group. As it is it's like you knew it was cool the other way and went out of your way to keep it from being so.

Mm. 11-13 in the BD part are mis-beamed. This piece is in 4/4, beam it that way. Same with the pinultimate bar.

Consistency. If you label or write an idea one way in one part of the piece, write it that way in ALL of the parts of the piece that have that idea. The pinultimate measure, for example, is an idea that's been seen before in SD. Yet it's notated differently (and worse).

As far as a cadence goes, it's a fine cadence. No offense to our percussionist friends, but cadences can only be so creative. I could use a bit more development of some of your rhythmic motives, though. Like maybe more hemiola on the SD lick I mentioned before. But again, the purpose of cadences is to beat time in a groovy way, not necessarily create a musical journey.

Cool pintos. Thanks for sharing!

You drive a gray car. And slammed the door on your hand.

I think the accents are misplaced in mm.11-12. It really should be on the first of each group. As it is it's like you knew it was cool the other way and went out of your way to keep it from being so.

Mm. 11-13 in the BD part are mis-beamed. This piece is in 4/4, beam it that way. Same with the pinultimate bar.

Consistency. If you label or write an idea one way in one part of the piece, write it that way in ALL of the parts of the piece that have that idea. The pinultimate measure, for example, is an idea that's been seen before in SD. Yet it's notated differently (and worse).

As far as a cadence goes, it's a fine cadence. No offense to our percussionist friends, but cadences can only be so creative. I could use a bit more development of some of your rhythmic motives, though. Like maybe more hemiola on the SD lick I mentioned before. But again, the purpose of cadences is to beat time in a groovy way, not necessarily create a musical journey.

Cool pintos. Thanks for sharing!

Thanks for the input, Peter_W! I will DEFINITELY work on that stuff! I always appreciate criticism// that said, I DO drive a gray car// but the piece is based on tapping/operating various mechanisms within the car to the beat of the turn signal.