Piano Work

Hi, new here(kind of, I tend to lurk around this site alot litsening to other people stuff) and sorta new to composing/playing piano. Ive been at it for year.This is something simple i worked on a couple of days ago. I wasn't following a particular style, I was just writing what came to mind. I think i unconsciously stole some melodies from other composers so you might find some familiar tunes.

So, for someone new to composing you have quite some intuition for doing interesting things.

There is a lot that can be learned, and that is nothing to be ashamed of I see you variate in harmony. variate a little in melody, put the stuff together in a kind of form. All these things are usually thing starters have to learn. So, well done!

I think people can point out what they would have done differently, but I think the most important question is, what do you want to learn? What do you think works in this piece, and what not?

Hi LExilenia - welcome! I'm pretty new here myself, but in the time I've been on I've discovered it's a fantastic community with lots of interesting people and music to explore.

So, regarding Piano Work in C minor - there are things I like and things I don't like about this, and I hope you don't mind if I briefly talk about both (bearing in mind, of course, that this is purely my opinion...) rather than fob you with of with a bland "ooh, that's nice". Here goes:

Opening - it's partly the midi sound (or whatever it is) but I feel it's bit clunky (e.g. the big right hand leap from ms5-6) and perhaps a little uninteresting until we get the "fruity" chords around ms17 which I like.

ms18-33 - this section really caught my attention - slightly whistful, but also quirky (I especially liked ms 21) and some interesting harmonic ideas (e.g. the transition from ms25-26, although I can't help feeling you could have done something more interesting with the left hand in those measures - don't ask me what, though!)

ms 34 - 43 feels a bit of a let down in comparison, and meanders somewhat, and (for me) the chord in ms 43 doesn't really work.

ms45 to the end - my interest picks up again (no coincidence that this harks back to the section I liked earlier) and I LOVED the unexpected B natural in the right hand in ms 48 - more of that kind of thing please! - and, the now familiar interrupted cadence in ms 52.

So, my overall verdict is that there is lots of interesting stuff here but the material is just a little inconsistent - we've all been there! I look forward to hearing more (I mean that!)

Jon

Sorry - I forgot that paragraph spacing doesn't work on here! My comments were all beautifully spaced out for ease of reading, but have now been bundled together in a slightly unintelligible jumble - good luck in wading through them (if you do)!

Thank you for the responses.

@jrcramer cant really answer the questions you ask at the end other than giving a vague one like; I want to learn everything I can! and I can point out my own personal problems about the work, but its purely for subjective reasons. I want to know what others think about, so they can point out flaws I cant hear.

@notlagj yea those clunky chords are something i am trying to run away from, this work is actually alot less clunky than the previous ones I made. It might be because Im studying counterpoint and using my left hand more than usual.

I glad you guys found it interesting. I dont know about posting any new works though, So I will just listen intill the time is right.