December 22, 20196 yr I love the mood this evokes. I feel it's not complete though. I think more could have been done with the arpeggios at measures 12 and 13. They seemed to abruptly cut off. Would have loved to have seen where that would have went.
December 23, 20196 yr Author 2 hours ago, jawoodruff said: I love the mood this evokes. I feel it's not complete though. I think more could have been done with the arpeggios at measures 12 and 13. They seemed to abruptly cut off. Would have loved to have seen where that would have went. I might revise it, I just wanted to finish something while working on some bigger stuff.
December 23, 20196 yr 32 minutes ago, Lucas Watts said: I Revised it! MP3 Play / pause Bagatelle_No._1_Revised 1:00 1:48 volume > next menu Bagatelle_No._1_Revised > next Oh I love the harmonies in the revised part. This ostinato pattern definitely provides something that can be worked with. I hope that you continue to work this material. You definitely have something here. Keep up the good work.
December 23, 20196 yr 17 hours ago, jawoodruff said: I feel it's not complete though. I think more could have been done with the arpeggios at measures 12 and 13. They seemed to abruptly cut off. I agree with this very strongly. As you said you're working on other stuff right now, you perhaps don't have much time to dig too deep in this piece, but it definately feels like it hasn't been worked through quite enough. I rhytmic ambiguity you created in the revised version was very required, in my opinion, and it made the whole thing feel a lot more complete. In general, it all feels quite square-ish (of course the midi doesn't help, and it will surely sound better when played by a human), and I think you can explore a lot more this material in various different directions. Make it more rhythmically, harmonically or melodically different than other existing pieces, I don't know, but I think you still require to make it "you-sounding". One way or another, his piece is in a good path and I think it may become very enjoyable if you decide to work it through.
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