January 6, 20206 yr Anything better I could've done to make it more baroque? Edit: and yes, I got some "inspiration" from the Brandenburg concerto 2. edit: yes, I caught the parallel octaves in m32, I fixed it by moving beat 2 up a 3rd, for parallel 3rds... Edited January 6, 20206 yr by i(don't)suckatcomposing
January 6, 20206 yr Good effort here! Nice main theme. A few things you could improve on: Avoid 2nd inversion chords; make sure the notes always fit the harmony - you have a D maj chord in the harpsichord at bar 12 but the notes in the upper parts do not fit (it should really be an A major chord here anyway); (optionally) add a double bass - it makes the bass line stronger; make sure to use conjunct motion - you sometimes skip a note and jump to a third or fourth, this is unstylistic; the piece seems to lose its way a bit towards the end, modulate to closely related keys only to begin with (G maj, A maj, E min, F# min, B min) - C maj/F maj are too far out; finally end in the same key you start! - Anthony www.newbaroque.org - Baroque style composition lessons
January 14, 20206 yr Your opening is what's catching my ear the most. The voice exchanged F# and G between the melody and the bass in m. 1 is a little odd, also it results in accented parallel fifths in beat 3. The perfect fourth going to the m7 in m. 2 creates a strange parallel dissonance that is resolved unidiomatically by octave retardation. P5's in m. 3, and in beats 3 and 4, you only have dissonant (m9) or open intervals (P5, P4).
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