May 18, 20205 yr I made some revisions after I copied the score so the audio sounds slightly different sometimes.
May 19, 20205 yr Nice piece. I think you could vary the bass part a little. Throughout the whole piece is plays some variation of broken chords in semiquavers and it gets a bit repetitive. The deceptive cadence 0:58 was good. Definitely unexpected! (From someone who wasn't looking at the score at that point). In the middle section, when you have an E# in the bass it sounds a bit off. Maybe experiment with the voicing of those chords to find something that works. I feel the middle section could do more to develop the 1st theme, it would make the piece flow better. Good work!
May 28, 20205 yr Very pleasant to listen too! was almost dream like. infact I bet one could orchestrate this with little difficulty. AS mentioned above the left hand could get repetitive after a while, perhaps in the section where the melody is in thirds you could give a more waltz like feel. and maybe try a C section. and turn it into a rondo. this piece has great ideas but I feel like they aren't as developed as they could be.
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