Weird anthem thingy i wrote

Honestly, it's a random combination of instruments smashed together in something that hopefully sounds cool. Let me know what you think.

@malumCompositor

Hey there. 

First of all- don't think bad of your orchestration. That's the way you want it, if it's special it's good because that's the way you see it and not someone else.

One thing you should consider though is that the rarer the orchestration the harder it would be for you to arrange a performance. 

*In my opinion- it's too monotonic. In a few aspects actually.

-Please make some accent in the percussion. It is a march already, with no accents it sounds just a little more complex than a metronome. 

-There is no rise and fall in the overall of the piece.

-It seems as if every instrument narrows to a very specific place in it's range, when you could have achieved more if you expanded it a little.

(look at the horn for example. You keep revolving around the lower-middle range. Why not let him express himself with some higher notes?)

*Some places seem to miss the bass line, it feels as if we have... no ground, you might say?

*I believe that you should give more place to your organist- enormous blasting chords, use of the bass pedals etc.

One sec I'll give it another listen and see if anything else comes up.

*Same goes for the guitar- have you considered overdrive? Chord streams?

*Ah! of course! It just came up to me crystal clear- the thing that bothers me the most is your use of rhythm.

It seems as if it consists entirely of eights, quarters, halfs and wholes, no syncopes that I've noticed and they all play similar rhythms to one another.

Here, have that:

The three different rhythms go on simultaneously without weakening one another, the other way around-

they add variety and texture.

Try adding more rhythms, syncopes, etc.

Truely hope that was helpful,

If you want to read and listen to the whole thing I'll leave out a link for you.

https://www.youngcomposers.com/t38585/my-first-work-for-a-full-orchestra/?tab=comments#comment-1186686387

@Rabbival507

Thanks for the helpful review.

So, to sum up what your saying, it's very basic and not much is going on. 

11 hours ago, Rabbival507 said:

Please make some accent in the percussion. It is a march already, with no accents it sounds just a little more complex than a metronome. 
 

How would and what would i add in the percussion line? I am no expert in percussion, so if you could give me a suggestion on that point that would be great.

6 hours ago, malumCompositor said:

it's very basic and not much is going on. 

Yes.

6 hours ago, malumCompositor said:

so if you could give me a suggestion on that point that would be great.

That's yours:

What I did in a march of mine:

the rhythm is still very sharp and stable, for it is still a march, but it varies depending on the surrounding and gives a variation once in a while.

Also at this part theres a lot going on in the winds so it's not as complex as it would have been if I had two other simple rhythms like in your piece.

Again, the rhythm can be felt strongly. And yet, it has different levels.