As the first man did not know

Short movement I might use in a larger piece using texts about Lady Wisdom in the Old Testament. Score is still messy...

Cool piece!

The thing that stuck out the most to me was the amount of time that all parts were in rhythmic unison. It creates a very specific sound, and if that's what you're going for, then great! But it can also be nice to have rhythmic independence between the parts, whether that be in a polyphonic way or even a more varied form of homophony, with accompaniment that sustains and swirls beneath the main melody line.

Thanks for your comment, I didn't expect a comment on this anymore but life is full of happy surprises😄 thanks for your compliment and your criticism. Your criticism nails a problem I often fall in to. I often like to focus on one thing, keep one obvious thing consistent throughout. I hope this can bring some comfort and clarity and a bit of a hypnotic effect. But sometimes it gets a little boring and people expect more variety. I guess it's like life: you need to balance things out for the best result. Thanks for listening once again!