February 2, 20233 yr Hi @hw1234, I am so happy you try to develop your materials! For me b.1-58 is formally a successful exposition of a sonata form! You build up the first subject in G minor and successfully modulate to Bb major in b.19. You achieve a perfect cadence in b.56-58 to end the exposition successfully! You have at least recycled your material, instead of having them appeared to be disappeared, e.g. the triplet figure in b.23 appears in b.49, repeated notes in b.5 appears in b.31. You can try to do that more! This will make the music even more coherent! Of course there are many details that can be added, but I am really happy that you try to extend and develop your music!! Bar 59-70 for me is a minuet movement, while b.71 to the end should be the finale. You can consider working on all those elements to work on a multi-movement symphony! Thanks for sharing! Henry
February 5, 20233 yr Hi Apart from the sound, which is not the best, what I find good here is there's plenty of material, perhaps too many ideas for this piece. So, I think spending little time on organizing the piece would improve the result. It's not easy, many times we want to be quick...
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