October 12, 200619 yr This is a Bossa-esck counter-point piece I wrote last year... what chall tink? *WARNING* the last chord is a bit gnarly anxitement.MID
October 12, 200619 yr Hello there, welcome to the forums Well I am really not trying to pick, but the forum rules ask that you write in preferably good english. And not use slang like chall and lol and such :thumbsup: But on the piece Very bluesy. I found it enjoyable as a blues piece, but I didn't really find it contrapuntcual. And the last chord, in my opinion, really shouldn't have been the last chord. 7ths really aren't the best choice to end pieces with. You have some good material, but I found that the piece really just went in a circle. In my opinion, you have enough material here to do some nice things with. Keep working on it and good luck with your music :o WiK
October 14, 200619 yr Overall not bad, nice feel - cool bossa. One thing to be more aware of is the harmonic structure. It's based on jazz/bossa patterns, make sure you know the progression intimately. In the melody and counterlines you could rethink a few things to make sure everything is...happy between harmony and melody. Try and avoid using the 11th (4th) as a melody note and scrutinize some of your voice-leading and chord-tone choices. The first 4 bars are great, nice bass line, good backgrounds...I'd love to hear more - open this up! Intro vamp? Drum solo on top....there's good material in here, just needs to be brought out and polished a bit... Thanks for sharing, let us know what you do with it.
October 17, 200619 yr While there were a few noticable flaws, which I will get to later, I was entranced by the piece, rare for me and bossa. Great beginning, nice chords. I feel it diminishes a bit too quickly. As the introduction, I feel it should set up a little more. Or do what Robin said and add a vamp or drum solo. The part where the melody pauses and the accompaniment does a chromatic motif: I like the color, but it doesn't seem to fit with the piece as a whole. Perhaps try a different scale? Soli section: beautiful. I actually don't mind the final chord, but, like the piece itself, it needs more of a setup. Add more in there to show that "OK, this is the ending coming up". Quite enjoyable. Don't stop!
