Need some critical analysis of a project for school

Hi guys :P

I'm composing a composition in order to gain entry to university to take a music course, and I need some feedback.

So tear it appart. Ask questions. Tell me everything you like and everything you don't like. Especially everything you don't like.

Presented for your approval in both .midi and .sib formats.

sad face.sib

sad face.mid

Hello HIHI, Welcome to YC,

Well, some work you've done with this i see lol. Nice work, I love how it was random.. but to me it seemed a bit TOO random, like there is no sense of where it is going. So That's just how i see it, other than that I think its great, wait for some others to comment, see what they can give u. Again keep up the good work, u are doing great, u are definitely on the right track. Good luck :P

Best regards

-James-

I liked when the bass enters at m.4 third beat

The xylophone part is, I guess, really out of range! It's going really low...

Also that's a bit short... :P

Maybe you should apply for mixt music - mixt with instrumental and electroacoustical... I'm sure that would be a great field for you. This way you could explore complexe timber and mixt them with isntruments. Well, it's what I hear in your music. You should try out some instrument recording and alter the sound by any mean you find and make music with it. You obviously are interested in the timber of low marimba notes... you could explore for example the acoustics properties of these notes and create new instruments like contrabass that virtually sounds like this.. etc... possibilities are endless for those interested to explore. I prefer paper music myself, but I explored a bit these things and they are quiet cool.

Guys it's actually for flute, piano and cello but for some reason midi files on my computer arn't the same as they are on other peoples :)

Should've said this earlier :

Here's a link to what it sounds like on my computer : Putfile - sad face

... hmm oki... ahah I prefered the unintended version... but I shall comment on this then. The part would have been wonderful for a marimba but sounds empty for a piano. It has a potential for character and personnality if performed with more pointed articulations like acctentuated tenutos staccatos for the starting melody. The part we hear has a feel of natural organization that ought to be clarified and amplified... around the end of the fragment we have here it begins to be 'tired' and goes no where. You have to find a way to make us want to listen furthur... and you wish to write furthur and go somewhere. You need to work more on the music before sending it to university...

So' let's go back to work !! :toothygrin: