Fantasia in D Major

Any feedback?

Edited April 23, 20241 yr by Cafebabe

Hi @Cafebabe!

I think the piece seems to be in 6/8 rather than 3/4 since the strong beats in each measure are the 1st and 4th eighth notes - there's clearly 2 main beats in the measure rather than 3.  There are some measures that are in 3/4 but imo they happen in the predominant context of 6/8 as a kind of hemiola.  The introductory motif in the right hand will be very difficult to play at the speed you have here since there are many consecutive same notes to play in a row which is very unidiomatic writing for the piano.  It works in a midi rendition but your performer will either be unable to play it that fast and will have to slow it down or will just kill their wrist trying to play it up to speed.  Also - you present a LOT of ideas in a short time, which is why I guess you called this a "Fantasia".  You could stretch this material out into a longer piece and flesh out the material more and give your ideas time to speak.  The main thing I wish you had more of is unity between your ideas - they should all be related somehow but you overload the listener with lots of variety.  The balance between unity and variety is a difficult one that composers have to contend with.  I also prefer this score view to the other piece you recently posted which had inverted colors.  This is much easier to see and read.  Thanks for sharing!

4 hours ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

Hi @Cafebabe!

I think the piece seems to be in 6/8 rather than 3/4 since the strong beats in each measure are the 1st and 4th eighth notes - there's clearly 2 main beats in the measure rather than 3.  There are some measures that are in 3/4 but imo they happen in the predominant context of 6/8 as a kind of hemiola.  The introductory motif in the right hand will be very difficult to play at the speed you have here since there are many consecutive same notes to play in a row which is very unidiomatic writing for the piano.  It works in a midi rendition but your performer will either be unable to play it that fast and will have to slow it down or will just kill their wrist trying to play it up to speed.  Also - you present a LOT of ideas in a short time, which is why I guess you called this a "Fantasia".  You could stretch this material out into a longer piece and flesh out the material more and give your ideas time to speak.  The main thing I wish you had more of is unity between your ideas - they should all be related somehow but you overload the listener with lots of variety.  The balance between unity and variety is a difficult one that composers have to contend with.  I also prefer this score view to the other piece you recently posted which had inverted colors.  This is much easier to see and read.  Thanks for sharing!

 

Thanks for your feedback. I think i'll rewrite it or reuse those ideas in something better thought (mainly because of the awkward unplayable parts).

I agree on both counts. It does seem like 6/8 is a better fit. And, overall, it does seem to me that there are a lot of things that don't seem to come up again. That doesn't go very much with the style of the work.
One thing I think you have to watch out for is the textural changes. Suddenly there are two-voice chords, suddenly there are 4 or 5.... You can do all that but I think it requires some kind of preparation.