Bagatelle No. 1

Hi @Cafebabe,

Basically the form of the piece is ABCA with the C section the longest. I really enjoy the modulation to C minor in the C section, but you should use Eb instead of D#! Beware of the redundant bass clefs in between! I think you can develop A, B and C section for longer. The A section is for me too short to be the main section when C section is longer and more attractive. The B section is too diminutive to have much attraction! It’s light hearted and in dance rhythm and for sure you can develop more on it! Thx for sharing!

Henry

I find it to be a fairly well-balanced work that sounds classicist at first but becomes a bit early romantic Which doesn't seem inconsistent to me.

I think it has a perfect series of repetitions. One thing that tires me of this style is the exact repetitions of whole sections. I know it's a matter of the forms used, but hey, nowadays you can vary it.

It also sounds very fresh and with its contrasts.

Hi @Cafebabe!

An interesting classical-styled piece of yours once again!  I have some critique for you - I think that your triplet 16th notes in this are almost too fast relative to the rest of the melody which is happening at the rate of 8th notes in the beginning.  Almost like a recording of a piece being played too fast.  Usually these kind of fast runs in the classical style have some kind of underlying logic to them - like being based on a melody or retaining the contour of the melody in between the additional 16th notes which make it more virtuosic.  But your use of the triplet 16th's seems unjustified and like it's just an empty showiness or frippery without substance.

I also feel like you could have given some of your phrases more space to feel like they fully have time to breathe.  Like at meas. 35 - 36 it feels like you resolve to A minor too early.  If this was my composition I would linger a bit longer on E7 or possibly just E major or extend that trill you have in meas. 35 longer to give the phrase time to breathe.  When you resolve early like this it sounds hurried and like the listener isn't allowed the time necessary to appreciate the phrase as a living, breathing piece of music.  Instead it sounds mechanical and un-mindful.

But overall I enjoyed this bagatelle!  Thanks for sharing.