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Hello again @kaiyunmusic!

What a wonderfully sweet piece!  Great job and I'm glad you're finding satisfactory ways to title your music and the ending is alright too!  Sometimes a piece can end on a sort of cliffhanger ending or on a question rather than a conclusive finale which is more fitting for this style of music.  I have a critique of your meter in this piece - for the majority of the duration of the piece it's actually in 3/4.  You can tell it's in 3/4 in the beginning because your melody is stressing the G, A, B ascension with D's in between.  So that's 3 primary pulses per bar with 1 note in between each, hence 3/4.  In 6/8 you would have two primary pulses per bar with 2 notes in between them.  And you do actually have sections in your music that temporarily switch to 6/8 such as measure 25 and measure 53.  I also love how the piece actually loops really well like it could be used in a video game or perhaps more appropriately as a lo-fi chill hop track.  The harmony is also quite ambiguous.  I think the piece is actually in G major rather than in E minor since you have a D major chord at the end in a type of half-cadence, preparing for a recap in G major.  But instead the piece starts in E minor creating a kind of deceptive cadence.  Very clever writing!  Thanks for sharing.

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hi @PeterthePapercomPoser, thank you for your constructive feedback and thank you for explaining how to figure out the meter again! I keep getting it wrong xD

I'm working on my next summer piece and am already confused on what the meter should be. For the ending of Star Away, I was going for a something fading away in the far distance. 🙂 

I would love to try making lo-fi music one day, but I have no experience with beats as you can probably tell from my struggle with meters 😅

 

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