Rate my 3rd Sonata!

It feels like a toccata...

https://musescore.com/user/96214813/scores/27723544

Can someone please review this? Thx!

I think the initial motif, consisting of one measure, is repeated too often (16 times). It then gives way to another motif in eighth notes that is also repeated many times.
I don't think it's just a matter of repetition, but rather that limiting the motif to one measure results in a lack of musicality overall (there is no unity in the overall phrase).
The cadenza suffers from something similar.
On the other hand, there are some parts or moments where the writing is less suited to a real pianist than to MIDI-type sound.

I think that if it were treated differently, in terms of accents and dynamics, it could be closer to a contemporary sound. Although the cadenza moves between a very classical style and a more naive one.

In measure 85 there is a change, but the idea of the rhythmic ostinato remains throughout.

The scherzo, in my opinion, is too fast. The trio promised a change, but the accompaniment is just as fast. At those speeds, which I don't know if they would cause fatigue in the performer, the musicality is lost (for me).

I quite like the Lento, it has a predominantly quartal harmony that makes it very clear sonically. Some mega-chords in the left hand need to be rewritten using both hands. The change (transition) at bar 33 needs to be worked on, as it is simply an abrupt turn.

The Allegro ma non troppo is also very good; it sounds very Mozartian.

I think there are many different ideas, and a sonata is not just about taking different structures and placing them one after the other. Perhaps the complicated thing is to make it sound like a single thing.

On 11/4/2025 at 7:38 PM, Luis Hernández said:

I think the initial motif, consisting of one measure, is repeated too often (16 times). It then gives way to another motif in eighth notes that is also repeated many times.
I don't think it's just a matter of repetition, but rather that limiting the motif to one measure results in a lack of musicality overall (there is no unity in the overall phrase).
The cadenza suffers from something similar.
On the other hand, there are some parts or moments where the writing is less suited to a real pianist than to MIDI-type sound.

I think that if it were treated differently, in terms of accents and dynamics, it could be closer to a contemporary sound. Although the cadenza moves between a very classical style and a more naive one.

In measure 85 there is a change, but the idea of the rhythmic ostinato remains throughout.

The scherzo, in my opinion, is too fast. The trio promised a change, but the accompaniment is just as fast. At those speeds, which I don't know if they would cause fatigue in the performer, the musicality is lost (for me).

I quite like the Lento, it has a predominantly quartal harmony that makes it very clear sonically. Some mega-chords in the left hand need to be rewritten using both hands. The change (transition) at bar 33 needs to be worked on, as it is simply an abrupt turn.

The Allegro ma non troppo is also very good; it sounds very Mozartian.

I think there are many different ideas, and a sonata is not just about taking different structures and placing them one after the other. Perhaps the complicated thing is to make it sound like a single thing.

 

If you pay attention, there are no mega large chords. It is supposed to be played with both hands.