災害後 Saigai Go (Reprise) - Reworked

Sagai Go (Reprise).pdf

I have reworked this piece since I last shared it, a few months ago. Sort of at a loss for what to do next, so I've been going over some older scores, correcting mistakes, improving harmonies and adding sections in places where it felt lacking. This score in particular, I had always felt was missing something; like the last section into the outro was rushed. So I added in a section between there to smooth out the transition into the outro, and have also changed the key of the score. 

I think it came out quite beautifully. I wasn't very scrutinizing to it for much else other than it's flow. If there are other mistakes that I missed, please feel free to call em' out 🙂

Hi @UncleRed99!

Clearly I forgot your original post so I will just treat this as a complete new one lol. 

On 10/29/2025 at 3:26 AM, UncleRed99 said:

I think it came out quite beautifully.

I think so too, I enjoy this Japanese style music with a slight sadness but not too much. 

I feel like in b.51 the transition to a louder passage is a bit abrupt, maybe add a gradual transition with a volume crescendo before it? Because for me it's the only place I feel abrupt in the entire piece even though there are other spots with the tacit after a fermata.

I feel like the trumpet melody in b.61-63 is too high in its register and will overpower the other instruments. Overpowering is ok but I think it doesn't fit your style here too much personally. And in b.53-57 there's an imitation between oboe and saxophone, but I think the oboe is overpowered by the saxophone so the imitation is not the most effective. And in b.94-95 I feel like the accompanying figure is given too much emphasis particularly with the 1st violin and trumpet. Maybe remove the trumpet?

I sound nitpicky, but I do enjoy the piece! Thx for sharing.

Henry

Well, I like this so far, halfway through.  Starts impressionistic, then goes all poppy, like a well-composed film score.  Only criticism I can think of right now is NEVER LET UP THE RHYTHM!  Don't take that too literally...Mendelssohn was a great composer in his orchestral writing, but his piano music is lovely yet flawed:  he tended to take one figuration and repeat it for the entire piece, and some of those figurations have been called "sugar icing" by the piano in his solo and chamber works, concertos...

18 hours ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

And in b.53-57 there's an imitation between oboe and saxophone, but I think the oboe is overpowered by the saxophone so the imitation is not the most effective. And in b.94-95 I feel like the accompanying figure is given too much emphasis particularly with the 1st violin and trumpet. Maybe remove the trumpet?

Now that you mention it, I can see where I got a bit zealous in the writing as it pertains to what the playback sounded like 😅 

And since it was a while ago that I actually wrote this score, I didn't change much from how I had it originally. I may go back and rework those sections now that you say that, because I would happen to agree with those notions.

Thanks for your feedback Henry! It's always appreciated 🙂

14 hours ago, Churchcantor said:

Well, I like this so far, halfway through.  Starts impressionistic, then goes all poppy, like a well-composed film score.  Only criticism I can think of right now is NEVER LET UP THE RHYTHM!  Don't take that too literally...Mendelssohn was a great composer in his orchestral writing, but his piano music is lovely yet flawed:  he tended to take one figuration and repeat it for the entire piece, and some of those figurations have been called "sugar icing" by the piano in his solo and chamber works, concertos...

 

 

Would you be willing to elaborate on this point? (meaning, if you would, explain your thoughts on this, by quoting bar numbers or specific phrases where I could improve upon this idea?)

15 minutes ago, UncleRed99 said:

Would you be willing to elaborate on this point? (meaning, if you would, explain your thoughts on this, by quoting bar numbers or specific phrases where I could improve upon this idea?)

 

Well, it's no big problem, but sometimes you "drag" your cadences!  I'll try to find an example, but making spaghetti sauce right now; maybe in the morning.

12 hours ago, Churchcantor said:

Well, it's no big problem, but sometimes you "drag" your cadences!  I'll try to find an example, but making spaghetti sauce right now; maybe in the morning.

 

No hurry! 🙂