Title theme WIP

Here's a title theme I did. Make sure to give criticism.

title2.mid

Only thing I can think of is it needs some more... I dunno.... oomph....

I like the power in the beginning and the movement of the melody is good, but I think you could have played more with the effect of dynamics on the listener. Also, although the syncopation was an option (in the xylophone?), I think it distracts from the melody. Maybe consider bringing the dynamics of that part down. I really liked the beginning! how you passed the motif between voices was a cool effect. But the end seemed to lose that energy.

Give Oomph by adding more pedals (i.e held bass notes) - preferably tremolo strings over the starting section. That'd instantly beef it up, if you had a really fast duhduhduhduh in the bass.

Needs more movement; it's a great start and you orchestrated it well but it feels under-developed after the beginning portion.

The style is great though, so keep that up, just work on giving it some more substance.

It seem that you are off to a good start as far as the general idea is concerned. Its a little too short for me to give concrete comments. At first it seemed as if the harmonic movement around :15 - :18 was a little rough. It just might be me.

Good start, though.