Die Verwilderde Pianis

This is my piece. It is about a frightened, chased away (possible) or wildered pianist. Like when you lost it all in life, you become "verwilderd".

The Form: A B A. It's a bit strange though, few moculation except for the occational modulation to the dominant. But still a great piece!

The MIDI is terrible... Oh my soul! I made a couple of small changes later on that you won't hear in the MIDI, but that's okay. You will get an idea.

All positive (and negative!) commentary welcome!

Pieter Smal

Die Verwilderde Pianis.pdf

Die Verwilderde Pianis.mid

Hello,

Nice piece. I really like what you do in bar 32 and thought that sort of unexpected melodic treatment could occur more perhaps. But that's not really necessary, it all works very well.

The only issue I really have is that the middle section does become a little tedious to me. Also, I'm not sure whether the score or the recording is what you actually want when they don't match, but for bars 27-30 I'd suggest keeping it how the recording plays it, and perhaps considering using the pedal C# for the following section instead of octaves, but the octaves do work quite well.

Anyway, hope that helps!

Best wishes,

Camilla

Yes, I'll change bar 27 to 30 back to the way it was. Or make an ossia there.

Personally, I felt the notes, playbability and overall music structure is quite good. The only thing I pity is I could not understand the real meaning of the title (German I guess?) therefore, I could not relate your music to title. I could not link the music to "frightening" or "chased away".

The title is Afrikaans. The First part is a bewildered part - the pianist is shocked or angry. The second slow part, the pianist is the misteriously vexed or perplexed. In the final part, the anger comes back.

Pieter Smal

yes, lol, the MIDI is terrible, but i can imagine it sounding really good played by a human.

btw, the beginning and the end reminds me of the 1st theme of Tchaikovsky's piano concerto in B flat minor.

i like how you tied the beginning and end together.

I liked this piece a lot - it has good contrasts between the fast and slow sections, and an interesting theme. It must be fun to play and the sound would be much better on a real piano.

Possibly some tempo variations in the "presto agitato" part would bring out the "bewildered" mood more - I thought the steady tempo was more "hurrying" - a bewildered person might have some slight hesitations so a pause could also be inserted (maybe?). Just a suggestion.

Well done. :thumbsup:

Pietr -

The writing is very pianistic and you use its resources fairly well. nevertheless, I feel that harmonically the whole work repeats the same progression with just different figuration and texture - mostly in the right hand. So I think there is MUCH more which could be done with this piece - think of what Chopin does in his octave etude in Op 25!

Also, the repeated note with leap figure though pleasant reminds me a little too much a Listz's La Campanella - unless that was your intention. Using the figuration is not a problem but I feel you rather offered a "light" version of it.

So there is a much promise in this piece, I just don't think you have fulfilled it. Overall the strongest section is you A material - the alternating octaves at Presto.

I agree with composerorganist about the strengths of this piece - the A theme is very exciting and illustrates bewilderment and anger well. I'm afraid I found the B material a bit tedious after a few repetitions of the same harmonic idea just with different figurations. I agree also that this piece could achieve a lot more than it already does, by playing around with the B theme and developing the harmonic ideas perhaps? But overall, I came away with a good impression of this piece even if it's not really my cup of tea.

Thank you for the comments. Bless you all!

Yeah the MIDI got pretty fubar somewhere in there...

It's a nice little piece, but it seemed to be all bluster. I really liked the left-hand chords, which is something that a lot of people forget about, but in this piece it's all about the left hand, since the right hand is just doing arpeggios.

The piece is Largely inspired by "Berlioz" (from YC) and Lawrence Dunn. I thank thee - and absolve the rest! Hehe! :D

Well I thought this was good, and I think it illustrated your title very well, although it seemed really repetitive harmonically. The A section was basically just one voice, which personally I find kind of bland, but the way you presented it was interesting. And the B section was just one repeated harmony, which was cool the first couple times, but then got tedious I thought. The few times you did stray from you harmony did really stand out in the piece I thought, so maybe you could do more of that. Maybe incorporate some of that variation from the B section into the A section or something. I dunno.

But ya, overall I liked it.

Is jy Afrikaans, Pieter?