Forced Between

A simple song I created a few days ago. I was inspired by a friend on YouTube, who's name is Smilexandcryx.

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Serge

This site takes awhile to warm up to people. Sometimes it feels like they just will not warm up and then you get a number of responses to your posts and things seem okay. Then it is back to no one saying a thing about your posts. I know how frustrating it can be, but bear in mind that a few of us always make a point of finding a post from one who has commented in our threads and returning the favor as I am doing now.

Now to your piece.

There are times when a note can be held for a long time in a piece and not become boring. Even times when a note go oscillate slowly between 2 notes and not be boring. But I am afraid this piece is not one of those times. I got tired real quick of the part for the strings. If you hold the same note for so long, at least vary the dynamics to make it have some interest.

If you go back and vary the strings some more in this, it would help to make this a lot more stimulating of an experience.

Ron

Thank you for the feedback: and it's ok, lol, I'm not frustrated at all with the site ^_^

Hello, Serge.

Welcome to YC. I see you've been commenting on lots of people's works, which is great! I also think I read somewhere that you're quite new to composing, so welcome!

Anyway, onto the piece. I don't mind your ideas here, there's that bit of dissonance thrown into the piano part, which works nicely. I do get the feeling, though, that you've been sucked into the temptation that's always there with Sibelius, which is "copy and paste." Repeating material is a great way to reinforce it to the listener, but you need to be careful in how you repeat it. An exact repetition leaves the listener with no surprises. So while copy and paste can be a time-saver, be very careful to use it wisely. The other thing I think you need to work on is some counter-rhythms. Listen to any of the "great" composers and you'll notice that they constantly have something happening rhythmically that keeps the listener focused and interested. In this piece, you have all the rhythms working together, which ends up being predictable. Things like syncopation and counter-rhythms help to avoid this problem.

Anyway, hope you find the feedback useful and welcome again to the site!

That is a good idea, Asparagus: you can repeat the main idea without doing it EXACTLY. Thanks for that ^_^

I'll have to echo the comments above. Just not enough variation in what you were doing to keep my attention. It's nice and light, and might work in a TV, movie or commercial setting, but as a listening piece, perhaps not so much.