January 20, 201016 yr I really like the ideas in the intro however because you stick to such traditional use of harmony I personally don't think it conveyed the wanted emotional as strongly as I would think I could, but that's just me hahaha! Well done!
January 21, 201016 yr Sounds pretty nice. I would agree with Kevin though that the emotion doesn't quite come across as strongly as it could. In addition to what he mentioned about the harmony, I think another factor is that the instrumentation and the ostinato in with the piano and harp makes the sound a bit too predictable and stagnant. I think the piece could have used a bit more contrast in texture and dynamics overall. BUT, that aside, I think you've done a good job here.
January 21, 201016 yr Nicolai To me "She Leaves" should be a very strong emotion, whereas you also state this as a small sad deal. I agree with small sad deal and think it works very well for that. In a Film context, you would not want strong differences in the dynamics, so I think they work well. In fact, at one point you increase the volume in what may be too much in keeping with a small sad deal. Nice to see you back. Ron
January 21, 201016 yr Author Thanks guys and I agree, the piece is very traditional and this could make it boring. I think there could be more different variations.. I\ll keep this in mind for next time. rolifer, hey nice to be back! Yeah keeping the swells toned down is important. Lavr, I only have a .midi file, no actual notation. I can upload this if you want.
January 21, 201016 yr This would really work as a soundtrack to a film: very nice job with that! It's not distracting at all, and it would really enhance the viewing of an important part of a movie.
January 22, 201016 yr Hey Coax! You win the award for most ambiguous piece description ever. :P Anyway, others have covered most of my thoughts, so I will only say that to my ears you need to take the emotion and really fly with it a bit. You don't have to be more grandiose in terms of size and dynamics, but some richer harmonies and more complex orchestration would elevate this piece to an entirely different world. The only other thing is that your production values are kind of flat. If you're working in a sequencer, play with the MIDI data a bit more to squeeze some realism out of it so that you don't end up with such static and mechanical lines. Also spread your mix out a bit so it doesn't sound like all the instruments are sitting on each other. If you're working in a notation program, you should consider taking it to the next level and learning to do your sequencing in a dedicated program like Cubase or Sonar or Logic or whichever suits you. Your results will be incomparably better. Nice work though, thanks for sharing!
January 22, 201016 yr Very nice piece. Beautiful, sweet, not too over the top. I would of loved to hear some more variations with different instruments, rather mainly strings.
January 24, 201016 yr Author Thanks guys! Marius: Yeah I agree on all your points and these kinds of things are of course something that could almost always be improved. I didn't take the piece far out enough in terms of harmonies/melody, but maybe I will later. Although I feel like starting a new one. I am a newbie composer so I'm always striving to get better at the things you mention, thanks for being strict and bringing it to my attention, it helps me analyze my pieces better.
