Exposition

Hi,this is a homework for school.We had to write 4+4 Bars and we got 2 Bars to continue. I don't know, how these are called in english, maybe someone could help here: (4+4 Bars) (2+2+4 Bars)So what I did: I made 8+8 Bars. And the 8 Bars separate into 2+2+4. And the 4 in 1+1+2.So very complicated ;)After I finished it, I thought "Oh thats nice, let's make a sonata"So I started and made the exposition. I don't know whether it's right, so I thought I just ask before I continue writing.I have first the theme. Then I am modulating to the 5th. Then I have the second theme. Then I have the end-part and then a repetition.Hope also, you like it.All criticism is welcome and any other suggestions as well!Cheers!Armin

Exposition

Hello Armin and thanks for posting here. Great little Mozartian main theme. I can see why you used it. This is really great as a first attempt at a sonata! The shift to minor key works brilliantly. Why so much minor though? Normally sonatas modulate to the dominant for the second theme but this sounds so strongly minor it creates a very different, Schubertian kind of effect. Your little ornamentations are wonderful. They really add to it. I would end the exposition with a better sense of us being in the tonic. You would then expand on this idea for the coda of the whole movement. The major/minor ambiquity at the very end leaves us uncertain where we need to be certain

Perhaps have the codetta material strikingly different that what has come before. Something rhythmical again in the home key.. Mozart is the one to look to for this.

Really well done for enthusiastically doing so much to a hw exercise and such a great attempt. hones:

Thanks for your reply jaime and thanks for the kind words, too :)

By the way, I called the piece "sonata", but I just meant "sonata form".

I don't know, why I use minor so often, maybe I just like it more then major :P It's funny that you mention a "Schubertian effect" because the first two bars are from Schubert. As you also said - Sonatas modulate to the dominant - so does mine. Have a look at bar 25. There starts my second theme. It's in C-major, but I know, after a few moments I am again in minor :lol:

I read the wikipedia (yes I know.. :unsure: ) article about sonatas and it said that in the exposition there is supposed to be a kind of uncertain feeling about the key or something like that. So should the exposition end again in F-major? That'd be no problem :) Or C-major? I really didn't get it.

And thanks for the advice with Mozart, maybe he'll be able to encourage me to write in major :facepalm:

Thanks very much!

Armin

This is a charming little piece. You introduce two good melodies and combine them very well. You should be proud to hand that in as homework :) The only thing I can offer as advice would be to vary a bit more between ornamenting with triads, and not, in your second theme; I have the bars 33-40 in mind. Job well done :)

I think this is really nice work! It reminds me of a mix between Mozart and a little ragtime.

I agree with Silajs: just a little more variation in measures 33-40 would spice up a crucial part of your pieces which serves as "falling action" for your piece.

Thanks for sharing! :)

Very charming melody and very nice modulations. Great piece of homework :P

Thank you guys!

I'll have a look at these bars and at the end, because I asked my teacher. He said, the exposition is supposed to and in the key of the second theme :rolleyes:

But maybe I'll leave it, cause then it is special:P

Armin