"The uplift" alternate version

this has the score and has a different ending.. i was a little lazing in the ending so i just made a new one.

"The uplift" alternate version

Hey, thanks for posting a score! This was written amazingly, it's becoming my First favorited piece, great job! I love how the melody is articulated and how fun it all is. Then the slow part is very mystic, how you keep having great counterpoint appearing and disappearing.

One thing I would change is to add more harmony to the melody. You have good harmony in the whole notes and staccato quarters in the background, but you often have over five instruments playing the exact same melody. Especially in same instruments (like when trumpets 1 2 and 3 all play the same part) you should have them not playing the exact same melody.

Great work!

Thanks for the advice i will try to fix that kinda stuff but its really hard to multi task if you know what i mean.

I was disappointed. I listened to the version that you posted two days ago, and I quite enjoyed it. You destroyed your percussion section and I thought that was the best part!

listen this a scraped version. it watered down. i didnt destroy my percussion i never wrote it... the other version was a concept. played on my yamaha keybord recorded onto a mixer. im new to the so chill im working on it.

Why would you post both when on is watered down? :S

some one wanted the score.

You have a catchy melody! It was great, however like Impresario said, you have ALOT of unison and broken octaves, and I'd try to fix that! Like in the triplet figures starting in bar 65, why don't you try harmonizing them?

Also, you have the seconds playing higher than first in several instances, some may disagree with me but when it comes pitch i don't think seconds should be higher than firsts with a few exceptions of course!

You have a great start! I would expand the slower section, add better some great percussion and some better harmonies, and bam! you have your masterpiece! ;D

good work!