Dramatic sad piano

These are the first two parts of my piano composition called "A night in the forest".I don't know the music-theory, I just compose from trying, hearing,feeling and thinking.Please COMMENT if you LIKE it or if you DON'T like it, tell me what you LIKE and/or what you DON'T LIKE. I need advices and reviews to improve my skills.Thank you for listening)

Dramatic sad piano

I like it. I think for the style it needs better dynamics. It is suppose to be emotional but there are little dynamics to support it. If someone is emotional, sad or angry, they tend to be irrational. This piece has the those aspects. But people tend to be unpredictable. The dynamics don't support this. Sad maybe be someone quietly crying in a corner or on their bed but this isn't that kinda sad. At least that is the way I hear it.

I think it is improvisatory like but after a while it gets rather boring because of the lack of development. The second section has it and sounds the best but the rest do not so I'm not sure what your trying to say with them.

Nothing, IMO, is bad but it starts to sound too much like rambling on about some subject rather than telling a story. This is because of the lack of coherent development. Now, if you want to express confusion and such then that's fine but generally that is not good.

1. Dynamics. Imagine somebody playing this piece that maybe is hurt. Say his GF just left him. He would play it very emotional. One chord he might hit very hard and the next very soft. He would have have emotional outbursts where it would be very intense. etc... etc.. etc..

2. For long pieces you must use get into different tonal areas and colors. Without this almost always a piece will become tiresome.

3. Learn some theory so you can have a wider musical vocabulary so others can discuss with you in a more technical way. You'll also learn some things to get more mileage out of things such as common modulation techniques, altered chords, mode mixture, etc...

Overall, because I can imagine some of the improvements I think it has potential(which is why I like it). There are a few anti-climatic spots that could be removed to help increase it's tension but there are some good spots too. It sounds chaotic but that's what I like about it. But without the dynamics it sounds more confusing than emotional.

To me, what it sounds like is that you sat down and just "improvised" something without a clear idea where you were going/what you wanted to say. This is fine... or at least I sorta like music like that(probably because I do it too). But it is very difficult to hold a listeners attention for any significant length of time without a clear goal. If you don't have a clear goal almost surely they won't hear it.

Anyways.... just my thoughts.

Thanks JonS !

JonS really said everything I would have said, and maybe more. Good advice!

Did you already change the dynamics? Because there seems to be a pretty human playback now compared to a mechanical playback.

Genuinely nice job although it does last an awful long time :)

Nice piece in general the loud bit in the middle seems to me to be more angry than sad (or a very strong sense of sad at least)

I think the piece tells a tragic story but it does sound a bit long. Maybe the first portion of the piece would fit well on a movie soundtrack XD

p.s. the 2:18 part may be a little difficult for the average pianist to play

Nice piece in general the loud bit in the middle seems to me to be more angry than sad (or a very strong sense of sad at least)

I think the piece tells a tragic story but it does sound a bit long. Maybe the first portion of the piece would fit well on a movie soundtrack XD

p.s. the 2:18 part may be a little difficult for the average pianist to play

I love piano music but I've too much work (school, etc)... no time to practise piano (to improv my skills). I don't play so good cuz I had to choose between composing piano music and playing it... I choosed composing , but I even can't find enuf free time for it (no time to learn music theory and so on). It can take months to finish a (more or less simple) piece and at all that's my second piano composition.

I don't play my compositions so I put all notes into a music-programm (Fruity Loops with the EDIROL-Orchestral VST).. that's awful, because it's so hard to create realistic dynamics (a machine is playing my notes)...but I give my best.

Thank you all for your comments, they are great and helpful!