Moonlit Delusion

This is a composition that was somewhat written as homage to one of my favorite compositions: On the Nature of Daylight, by Max Richter. The song was featured in the film Shutter Island. This composition is completely inspired by that song. The mood, the structure, and some of the techniques used in Richter's song had great influence on how this turned out. I tried my best not to "steal" anything from his piece. I used different chord progressions, different melodies, and had more supporting parts. This is the first piece I have ever written that was completely strings.Constructive criticism encouraged.

Moonlit Delusion

It's pretty good

I've never listened to the piece that you intended to pay homage to, but I think that you could improve your composition by introducing a bit more dynamism/variety. For instance, try adding a line or two of double bass here and there. I guess you wanted to write a sad and solemn piece, but that doesn't necessarily mean you can't add occasionally something one or two octaves lower. Other than that, your composition is quite good, it sure does convey sadness, and even depression I would say.

Very nice piece, but i have to agree with nivin.

Btw, do I hear some Barber influence here?

Anyway, great melody! I would work on the harmonic progression a bit more, but you're definitely on the right track.

Keep up the good work!

Hey Guitarplaya,

Neat track. It takes a while for it to get started. For the first minute and a half, I was waiting for your piece to move. I finally felt some emotion around 1:58. That's too long for your listener.

Once everything comes together, around the two minute mark, this piece sounds pretty solid. 4:20, gets a little congested. I get lost in all of the lines. I'm not sure if you're trying to shift our attention away from the melody that was previously dominating. It could be that you were trying to go for a cloud of sound effect. It's a bit confusing right now.

The form of your piece has a nice arc to it. Can you make the ending just a bit longer? I felt like it was too sudden for how long your middle section was.

Nice writing, Guitarplaya! Spend some time polishing this track up and it will be great!

-John

Btw, I'm listening to On the Nature of Daylight right now. It's beautiful. They use it in the scenes with his wife right?

Yes they use it in the scene with the burning apartment and the wife. It was also int he scene when he is talking with the prisoner in the cell who is trying to tell him to let his wife go.