Longed for Salvation

Thanks for your feedback! I tried to give the song more depth. I feel like losing the repetition of the melody in the beginning is better than having the melody bare.More comments and suggestions are welcome! :)

Longed for Salvation

Like you said, your piece has a nice melody.

I think you could tighten up the drum rhythm. The 5th beat the drum hits (rim shot I think) is a split second too early.

Don't be afraid to add more layers to this piece. Along with your instruments, you could have some soft sustained notes from strings or brass.

Right now, I don't feel the emotion you're trying to convey. If it's a hard decision, I think the music should carry more weight to it. Thicker harmonies and lower sounds would help as well.

It's a good start, iiraiykha. Now add to it!

-John