Rest, Child, Rest

This is a piano piece I made to reflect sincerity and inarticulateness...at least that's what I had in mind xDI hope you enjoy =) Comments/criticisms/thoughts appreciated! :D

Rest, Child, Rest

this sounds fantastic... I can kinda imagine a female jazz singer in the beginning

Sorry for nitpicking, but Pedal is written Pedal, I believe . I think a treble clef is missing at m. 24 as well. There were some jazzy moments I found quite enjoyable, as well as some weird modulations which broke the usual pop train of thought. When the arpeggios stopped, I really started digging this, though abrupt modulations do get old after a while. Good work overall, I like it. hones:

All in all I found it very nice. Tragedy the notes got banged, but that's a MIDI thing. You do have somethings you might wanna look agt page wise. For example, m. 23 and 24 you have the treble lines with 3 8th notes instead of a dotted quarter rest. While technically right, things like that can look messy. Keep on writing!

Garcia:

Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Hugo:

Haha, thanks for telling me about the typo, I completely hadn't noticed :lol: I'll fix that when I can. I'm glad you liked it :nod:

Presto:

Yeah, sorry about the notes getting banged sometimes :\ I wish I had a way to record me playing it instead, it's a lot better sounding when played by a human.

Thank you all for your comments :D

I've found that striking key changes are very smooth if the old key is underplayed. For example at m. 24 if you left out the G#, that would sound quite a bit less like a direct modulation. If you turned it into a G natural (seeing as how it's an echo anyway), it'd actually sound like a legitimate modulation, even though it's a modulation of a half-step. The line can serve to fool the ear.

9/10. :phones: No points taken off for "BANG, BANG BANG BANG-BANG!!!"

I really like the main melody you've written, especially mm. 4-5. The first variation you go into works quite well I think, I think you should cut down on the arpeggios though. And then once again your lovely melody, I especially like the left hand in mm. 24. The crescendo at mm. 34 could be improved though, I think. There is not enough power in the tremolo in the left hand, I think you need to add more notes to the picture there. And the sf at mm. 37 would have benefited from a unison in my opinion, instead of a pale octave in the left hand. And it goes on, I don't like the variation there neither :P I think there are too many breaks. You have a constant change between climax and build up in mms. 40-43, I would have preferred one long build up instead. Then there's a good crossover to the melody, however I don't like the wide use of arpeggio, and then you go back to the main melody, which I gotta say is very enjoyable :)

Good work!

Peter:

Huh...that G natural suggestion, I'll check it out :) Thanks for the suggestion, and your rating! :D

Silasj:

Long time no see! :nod: Good to see you back!

I've been kind of divided about the arpeggios myself: when the piece is actually played by a person (i.e., when I play it, haha), the arpeggios sound fuller than the midi sounds, I think. I don't know what I'll decide to do with it though :dunno:

I actually meant there to be break-ups in the build-up though. I think I'll keep it like that.

I appreciate all of your suggestions very much! When I start updating my pieces, they'll come in handy :P