Faux Gymnopedie

This is a piece I improvised the past year. Also this was my first attempt to write music away the piano (and the computer, jejeje).Is called "Faux Gymnopedie" because the work deviates considerably of the musical language of the Satie's Gymnopedies.Actually this is not a work wich I feel particullary proud. without all the emocional meaning of it for me ('cause I composed it during a very hard and depressive time for me), I found it pretty unexpressive and dully.All critics are encouraged Greetings.reuploaded due suggestion

Faux Gymnopedie

It's not that there's no emotion to be found in this piece: I find it to be terribly depressing myself :sadtears:

It's just that the playback is harsh, for one thing, and the chord progression is somewhat...tedious, and oppressive. The constant repetitiveness of the already very slowly played chords is pretty dull, as you say... But this can be fixed up :thumbsup:

You have a very "2nd-heavy" atmosphere here, with the constant C and D chords, or D and E chords, etc., in the bottom hand. Why not contrast that with some other chords to create a more "rounded" feel? Also, cresc/dim articulations enhance just about any piece.

Thanks for sharing :)

Thanks for advising ;D

The harsh playing is because I used a vst (pianoteq 2, a very good modeled piano) and Sibelius to make the midi file. Really I wanted to post my interpretation, but I don't have a piano (At least for this week). Also, the dissonance of the substituted 2nd with minor 7th chords (The three in Eb. F and G) make the melody very unpleasant (Like I feel me these days [Long and sad story]). I'm thinking to adventure into more combinations of chords, but I have a big problem: I'm not good to coordinate harmony and melody, except by essay and error. Is a way to solve that problem?

Perhaps I'll post my interpretation (In the old Benchsteins of my school )

Greetings Serge.

Mmmmm, I love this piece. Satie is one of my favorite composers - and his Gymnopedie were my first introductions to his work. That said, I really like this. I think your adherence to your ideas and the harmonic motion that he set forth for this particular aesthetic works very well together. If I also might say, I think you should submit this to my Beginner Piano Music Competitions. You'll find it in the competitions subforum. I think this could have a chance at winning.

Doesn't sound unpleasant to me, I found it very relaxing. I really like that moment where there was suddenly no pedal, and it would be if you did that more (and marked the pedaling in the score). I think the ending is what makes it seem dull, you should ended it sooner rather than have that long thing. Also I would remove the repeat at the beginning.

I like how the melody comes in and out of the accompaniment texture, sometimes (partially because the pedaling, partially because the notes), it's difficult to hear the first few notes of the melody, then it emerges. Usually this would be a bad thing, but it suits the misty, non-committal feel of this piece. Great job! I'm favoriting this for some reason, but I'll give you a fair number of stars to make up for that.

I love the chords you are using, but I wish the melody were more agile and angular. With the static chordal accompaniment, I think you can afford to go to town with the melody!

Wonderful piece of music. I really can't say in any great analytical detail what I like about it. I know I could suggest things looking at the score but then I hear the piece and think, no don't change that. Thanks for sharing

Thank you for all you advising!